BACHELORS IN ECONOMICS; TRANSFER - University of Chicago

kabal 9 / 61

Jan 31, 2013 #1

Please tell us why you are planning to leave (or have already left) your current college or university

XXX-previous college

My attending XXX is a necessary mistake I had to make. I went to XXX community college understanding my decisions. My decision to attend XXX was based on academics and my financial position at the time. I was left with the tradeoff between the price of college and the quality of education I want.

I wanted a bachelor's degree in economics and I knew XXX did not offer bachelor's degree. However I was naive, hoping they had I great economic department that could convince me to just to get an associate degree. Sadly they failed; XXX's economic department is strong as the engineering or health care department. The economic classes I took were great, but I neither could apply what I learnt outside the class nor was there opportunity for me to participate in research with my professors. Even though the classes were not that expensive, I wanted more.

I was motivated to get a bachelor's degree but at the same time I didn't want to put my single mother and myself in debt we could not pay. Thankfully, I am economist at heart. I decided to attend a two year college. Attending a two year college would reduce the interest I would have to pay on a loan if I wanted to transfer to a school that fulfills my need.

Although XXX did not fulfill my needs, I know University of Chicago has the resources to fulfill my needs. I plan to be an economist and hopefully work at for the government, especially the US Federal Reserve, to implement policies. Policies that would not only drive the economy but would also have an impact on children's education, like am currently experiencing.

University of Chicago provides resources like the Heckman Equation, Economics Research Center, or the Becker and Friedman institute that would not only provide me with incredible research opportunity, but a chance to learn from professors, first hand, why they support different policy and challenge them on why some public policies like providing insurance for everyone or economic policies like taxing the rich, which are good at heart, but later have negative effect.

To achieve my goal, I need the opportunity challenge currently ideas, the resources to test this ideas and University of Chicago to provide me the platform to achieve my goals.

francescaniu 1 / 1

Feb 1, 2013 #2

You sound like a smart man, however, your essay has a negative tone. While the community college you attended may not have been what you were looking for, try to acknowledge some of the more positive experiences you had.

Sadly they failed; XXX's economic department is strong as the engineering or health care department.
This statement does not make sense. You first state the college failed you then attempt to compliment them on their economic department. Furthermore, as a reader, I have no knowledge of the strength of this institution's healthcare or engineering department.

especially the US Federal Reserve, to implement policies. Policies that would not only drive the economy but would also have an impact on children's education, like am currently experiencing. The second second is fragmented.

lauman112233 5 / 14

Feb 3, 2013 #3

I think your essay did convey the reason of your transfer; maybe saying how the college limit your future development, or maybe cannot support your career.

abrownie 6 / 14

Feb 4, 2013 #4

A little wordy. I might start with a slice of life at your community college - like a question you ask a professor and him telling you that you need to take a higher level course to better your understanding of the material. I would then go into how your college choice was based off a financial decision and that even though you have always wanted a bachelor's degree, you had very few other options. Then. I would go into a discussion of why UChicago's program suits your interests and would quench that thirst. Perhaps a good way to mirror your beginning and end (like you talked about on my post) would be to have the class you want mentioned by the teacher and at the end mention how UChicago has that class and you are very excited to take it, or if you have talked to a professor at Chicago, you can mention him by name (always good in college admissions) and talk about how he said there is a class that would explore exactly the answer to your initial question.

Good luck!