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Brown University supplement: What don't you know?



noiresia 1 / 6  
Dec 6, 2009   #1
Prompt:French novelist Anatole France wrote: "An education isn't how much you have committed to memory, or even how much you know. It's being able to differentiate between what you do know and what you don't." What don't you know?

What don't I know? I can't even begin to comprehend the massive amounts of what is unlearned, and so to best answer this question, I will tell you what I do know. I know that with everything in me I want to enter the medical field as a neurosurgeon and change people for the better. I know that I want to touch people in a way that leaves them hopeful, cured and inspired. I know that I want to write a novel that will shake the world and leave critics stunned. I want to make an impact that lasts long after I am gone. Of course, these goals of mine are overshadowed by what I don't know. I don't yet know all the things a professional surgeon should know and I don't yet have the knowledge or the insight to write something grand and lasting. In short, all that I don't know is what I feel I need to know and so much more. Isn't an education limitless? A living and growing attribute that only expands with experience and years? Anatole France said that an education is being able to differentiate between what you do know and what you don't. If this is true, then I have learned so much and yet so very little.

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So what do you guys think? I feel as if its repetitive. Anyone agree? Disagree?

reina92 5 / 6  
Dec 6, 2009   #2
Actually, I think this was a very powerful short essay. It flows really well and you expressed yourself, your outlook and personality nicely. Although the 2nd to last sentence can be worded a little better? Your use of parallel structure "I know that __" is effective, not just empty repetitions.
OP noiresia 1 / 6  
Dec 6, 2009   #3
Oh thank you so much.
You've just relieved every bit of tension in me.
EF_Kevin 8 / 13052  
Dec 8, 2009   #4
No! You cheated! Too much of this is spent telling what you do know, and that was not their challenge. You have a few options about how to approach this, but no matter what, you should go deeper than saying you do not know some of the things a surgeon should know.

You might want to mention how young people often make mistakes because they think they know all they need to know, and talk about some of the areas of medical knowledge that you do not know about. By doing that, you can reveal your interests while telling what you do not know.

Or... if you confess, for example, that the writing of this essay made you realize that you actually do not know everything you should know about first aid, that would make the essay very powerful.
ganadara000 1 / 4  
Dec 8, 2009   #5
Amazing essay! Short, compact, but powerful! Yes, it is a bit repetitive on what you "know" and "don't know." Try to find different methods of refering to them, like a colon or something.
NAhmed 1 / 5  
Dec 29, 2009   #6
You didn't answer the question. I think it is very important to answer the prompt, "What don't you know?" Stating that there is too much knowledge in the world to tell the reader what you don't know is not very powerful. However, I like your approach to saying what you do know. You should look into following what you do know with what you dont know.

Hope this tid bit of information helped.


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