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FSU What characteristics appeal to you?



rkane94 1 / -  
Oct 6, 2012   #1
Florida State University is more than just a world-class academic institution preparing you for a future career. We are a caring community of well-rounded individuals who embrace leadership, learning, service, and global awareness. With this in mind, which of these characteristics appeal most to you and why?

From a young age, I've always had a calling to service. It didn't take long for me to discover my innate need to do something greater than myself. My wide-eyed, naïve childhood-self took on projects and causes far too big for one child. Often, my ideas were shot down by adults, and I was repeatedly told that I couldn't make a difference. This never stopped me, however. As I grew into a young adult my passion for helping others only increased. I began to dedicate more and more time to causes I was passionate about. As I begin to prepare for adulthood, I feel as though attending an institution as prestigious as Florida State University is the next step in answering my call to service, where I can pursue a career in the medical field.

any feedback is appreciated!

hobak135 2 / 12  
Oct 28, 2012   #2
I really liked the essay, it painted a good picture of you ,but I feel as though you kinda skimmed around the question. Though its a prestigious university what about it made it appealing enough to help answer your call to service. Did someone you admired, that was active in community service, go to FSU? I think questions like that would be asked by whoever is reading it. Maybe you could say FSU is a place where you won't be shot down like you were all those years ago. I dont really know ,but that is something to think about.


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