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"Choose one activity." Univ. of Ill essay



jusanglee91 5 / -  
Dec 1, 2008   #1
Topic: Choose one extracurricular activity, work experience or community service project from the lost you provided on the application and explain why you initially chose it, why you continued with it, and how you benefited from it. (Less than 300 words)

If I had to choose one activity, I would choose the volunteer service at a hospital. I volunteered at a hospital as a snack bar assistant for a year and a half. This activity was the first activity in my high school career and it became the most meaningful activity in my life.

I started this volunteer service with the force of my cousin. At first, I was lazy and hated going to the volunteer service, but after few months, I started to like it not because I got free milk shakes and dinner, but because I was able to help the sick. When I saw patients walking by with the support of their family, I was not able to stop thanking God for giving me such a health and giving me the chance to make them snacks and foods.

When watching a patient enjoying the milk shakes I made, I just could not be happier. It was the feeling that you just cannot describe with words. That is why I continued this activity for a year and a half. Certainly, I benefited from this volunteer service. It had taught me a lesson: the chance you are given to help the patients is the gift from the angels. When you know that you are helping someone, be thankful that you are healthy enough to actually help the sick.

EF_Kevin 8 / 13053  
Dec 2, 2008   #2
I started this volunteer service because my cousin was urging me to do so. At first, I was lazy and hated going to the volunteer service, but after few months, I started to like it; I was suddenly experiencing the sense of purpose that comes from helping the sick.

I took out this part: it was not because I got free milk shakes and dinner, .

You write without many errors. Good essay. Now, as you succeed in college, you suddenly become a leader at a hospital instead of just a teenage volunteer. Good luck!!!
timothyerdei 4 / 16  
Dec 3, 2008   #3
At first, I was lazy and hated going to the volunteer service, but after (a) few months, I started to like it not because I got free milk shakes and dinner, but because I was able to help the sick.


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