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To me, fostering a cohesive, successful, and supportive campus community requires social and academic support, safety, and good communication. I know all too well that a poor social life severely detracts from academics. Since fifth grade, I have changed schools every two years. I had to make new friends four times, and I was not very good at it the first few times. It was very hard to concentrate on school work when I literally had no friends. Luckily for me, that no longer is a problem, and as my social life improved, so did my grades.
While maintaining a healthy social life is important, understanding and concentrating on school work is even more important. I believe that it is important that if a student puts forth his best effort and still cannot do well, then he should be granted all the help he needs.
Safety is essential to healthy campus. Students should never have to question their safety so that their minds can always be focused on their schoolwork. All of the listed things essentially tie into good communication. A campus that has good communication should have very social students. It should also have good academic support as the students should help each other, and good communication should deter and prevent any crime.
To me, fostering a cohesive, successful, and supportive campus community requires social and academic support, safety, and good communication. I know all too well that a poor social life severely detracts from academics. Since fifth grade, I have changed schools every two years. I had to make new friends four times, and I was not very good at it the first few times. It was very hard to concentrate on school work when I literally had no friends. Luckily for me, that no longer is a problem, and as my social life improved, so did my grades.
While maintaining a healthy social life is important, understanding and concentrating on school work is even more important. I believe that it is important that if a student puts forth his best effort and still cannot do well, then he should be granted all the help he needs.
Safety is essential to healthy campus. Students should never have to question their safety so that their minds can always be focused on their schoolwork. All of the listed things essentially tie into good communication. A campus that has good communication should have very social students. It should also have good academic support as the students should help each other, and good communication should deter and prevent any crime.
