djpralex 5 / 10 Dec 23, 2011 #1In the summer of 2010, I spent a month in the hospital caring for my sick grandfather, the man I am closest with even more than my dad. I spent more hours assisting him in the hospital than I did at my grandmother's condominium where I resided. At the hospital, I witnessed a lot of intricate examinations and procedures that the doctors performed on him. I became instantly fascinated by the activities that take places inside a hospital especially around the operating room. I was intrigued by the human body and the capabilities the body can withstand and endure. I watched as the doctors cut a path in my grandfather so that they can squeeze a chest tube into his lungs so that he can get postural draining for the mucus that was clogged inside him. I knew then that I wanted to study biology and medicine because at the hospital, the thought of watching a new procedure and acquiring new information about the human body selfishly overshadowed the thought of helping my grandfather get better. I am hooked by the challenge in the problem solving in medicine and I want to be able to explore deeper into this field. I now study AP Biology at school and it is one of my most devoted classes because the information and concepts taught draws a significant part of my academic interests. Therefore, through my experience inside the hospital and fascination with the human body, I see biology as a highly potential major for me.
deremifri 9 / 136 Dec 27, 2011 #3Some language suggestionsthe man I am closest with even more than my dad maybe: the man I am closest to"so that they can squeeze a chest tube into his lungs so that he can get" so that can is used two timesthe challenge of solving problems in medicineI want to be able to explore this field deepertake placedrawOther than that a good essay.
mukhia08 7 / 22 Dec 27, 2011 #4I think its really good, love the way how you linked the two. your experience with your grandfather was very touching and your essay answers the question its really quite good.
