Common App essay - to be a pharmacist or a doctor

A range of academic interests, personal perspectives, and life experiences adds much to the educational mix. Given your personal background, describe an experience that illustrates what you would bring to the diversity in a college community, or an encounter that demonstrated the importance of diversity to you ?

before writing it i just wanted to mention the points that i will talk about and please tell me if i'm offpoint or not...

-my goal to be a pharmacist or a doctor & my interest in science..i will indicate the reason behind that and what abilities that qualify me for this profession..honored in the top 3 of science fair twice in a row...

- i come from egypt a diversified country..
- my fantasy in debating myself ...this is why i applied for MUN (for debating)..
- my love for acting where i disregard my identity and....
- tendency to help the less fortunate ... a priest gave me a valuable advice ...joining the PTPI which is related to charity
-importance of sports: co-operation , healthy state...my talent in soccer ....me being in the school team..i would like establish a school club for soccer there...

conclusion: i would like to diversify , expand my social circle...etc..

these are the points that i will elaborate on...if there is anything i should add /omit about me... are these points in the right orderr... i need your reply ASAP

Hmm the prompt seems to be asking you for ONE particular encounter only. I can't see that very clearly in whatever you've written though. Maybe you should pick one of all those that you've typed out and just concentrate on that?

idk.. it says "academic interests, personal perspectives, and life experiences adds much to the educational mix" ... then it says up "describe an experience"..

i'm mixed up...do I write about my academic interests ,personal prespectives ...or just describe an experience ... like science.. should i write the whole essay about why i chose to be a pharmacist ? what qualifies me? ...

I think you should just describe an experience. The academic interets blahblah is just a way to introduce the prompt. You don't need to base the whole essay on why you chose to be a pharmacist, unless you feel that the reason behind that helps you add diversity to the college. Then again, there are many other students who would want to be pharmacists too. So your reason has to be rather distinctive.

So I suggest that you focus on a different experience then. The point of this prompt is not to sell yourself to the school, as in stating why you'd be a great addition to the school. The point is how you'd add on the the diversity of the school, and that can be anything. The fact that you're from egypt already makes you very different from others. Maybe you'd like to go on that track?

thanks alot man.. i think i should get started..
so here is what i'm doing

brief introduction about my goal : to be a pharmacist
what i experienced by living in egypt...cultural values and stuff (for example helping the less fortunate... , hostility ...bla bla bla")

conclusion summing up everything

Right ??

yup try to link the egypt thing to your goal somehow if possible. :)

all the best!

You might want to leave off the pharmacist angle altogether. The prompt really wants you to focus on how you will add to diversity, or on something that you experienced that made you appreciate diversity. Unless your desire to be a pharmacist ties into that in some way, it will seem off-topic.