I totally agree with you when you say that the society requires different types of people. However, you will not become a tiger just because you think you are. Real champion, the excessively proud and obnoxious kind, communicate their arrogance through their actions, and sometimes words in such a way that people can 'feel' their presence.
However, in your essay, you did not show anything about yourself. All you did was stating some unfounded opinions that you thought appropriately fit you. No! The essay desperately lack some important solid evidence that support your claim.
I get such a confidence in my intellection that I have never been second-best in any intellect games played, such as chess, go chess, strategic games and even number puzzles.
Let me tell you, this is the result of not challenging yourself against the best people. Instead of showing off your awesomeness, it shows exactly the opposite.
The idea is good, the analogy is appropriate, but the
flow and the overall
feel may need some work. Try may be to include some more details about your life.
My feeling of superiority strengthened by the achievements actually adversely distance me from people. I therefore decided to change my life style upside down, Joe became my new example and I did anything following his suits. To my disappointment, I didn't gain popularity like Joe did by that way, to make is worse, teachers and friends were shocked that I acted like a totally different species, from a tiger to a cat.
These lines contain some neat ideas, they worth more elaboration.
G L~