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COMMON APPLICATION - SHORT ANSWER QUESTION
In the space provided below, please elaborate on one of your activities (extracurricular, personal activities, or work experience) (150 words or fewer).
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During my first year in junior college (which is equivalent to Grade 11/junior year), I took part in a two- year Bicultural Studies (China) Program organised by my school. This program was specially designed to allow students to better understand the Chinese culture, and to gain insight into the development of modern China through talks given by invited speakers who are experienced in the related fields of study. In addition, this program also included an immersion trip to China at the end of the first year of the course. The experiences and lessons this trip had provided me are invaluable. I grew from this experience of participating in this exchange program as I learned to be more independent and through my interactions with the Chinese student, I came to appreciate the differences between their and my culture, and that people's beliefs, behaviours and ways of thinking are rooted in traditions. From this experience, I see significance in having cross- cultural trainings, especially in the face of an increasingly globalised world. [170 words]
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Thank you very much for the help and guidance :D
p.s. I am from Sinagpore, thus our education system might be a bit different from the States...
COMMON APPLICATION - SHORT ANSWER QUESTION
In the space provided below, please elaborate on one of your activities (extracurricular, personal activities, or work experience) (150 words or fewer).
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During my first year in junior college (which is equivalent to Grade 11/junior year), I took part in a two- year Bicultural Studies (China) Program organised by my school. This program was specially designed to allow students to better understand the Chinese culture, and to gain insight into the development of modern China through talks given by invited speakers who are experienced in the related fields of study. In addition, this program also included an immersion trip to China at the end of the first year of the course. The experiences and lessons this trip had provided me are invaluable. I grew from this experience of participating in this exchange program as I learned to be more independent and through my interactions with the Chinese student, I came to appreciate the differences between their and my culture, and that people's beliefs, behaviours and ways of thinking are rooted in traditions. From this experience, I see significance in having cross- cultural trainings, especially in the face of an increasingly globalised world. [170 words]
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Thank you very much for the help and guidance :D
p.s. I am from Sinagpore, thus our education system might be a bit different from the States...