Your paragraph is a good start. Just a couple of suggestions;
social will have big changes
the social scene will have big changes...
Your adjective needs a noun, there, I feel, and that makes it sound better, too!
they are breakthroughs...
there are breakthroughs
Using the correct word always means you get a better impression, in on the professor. I think you need to pay attention to your word choice especially with pronouns, and adjectives. I think a good grammar book would help. Your imagination is well thought out, and you bring a fresh outlook to a vision of the future. It sounds like you've thought about it a lot.
Just some attention to detail of word choices is needed to improve this paragraph, especially with adjectives, and pronouns. If you consult a grammar book and dictionary you will find them useful, and this may help correct your writing problem.