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Essay describing experiences that led to my decision to enter a health field



premed123 2 / 3  
Oct 12, 2011   #1
I am applying to the International Health Program at Georgetown and the essay prompt asks: Describe how your experiences or ideas shaped your decision to pursue a health profession and how these experiences or ideas may aid your future contribution to the field.

* Operation Smile is an organization that works to repair facial deformities such as cleft lip and pallate

I was sitting on a bench in a crowded hospital hallway in Bolivia when I noticed a haggard man. He had a cleft lip, and years of shame and humiliation were visible in his sad eyes. His timid nature was palpable as he stood alone waiting for his chance to be screened for surgery. I stood up and walked toward him and asked him his name in broken Spanish. He looked afraid, but then his eyes lit up; it was, I found out later, the first time someone had voluntarily approached him. I also found out he was sixty-years-old and about to have his first physical examination. He stood out to me because he was the oldest man lost in a sea of children. These children were young and resilient; the shame and guilt that had ravaged this man had not yet reached them. Meanwhile, this man's feelings could have been avoided had he lived in a country with better healthcare.

A cleft lip and palate is not a major concern in the United States solely because of the relatively easy access to medical care; this repair surgery occurs at the age of five months, while the man I met lived for sixty-years unnecessarily as an outcast. NEED TRANSITION I have watched my father struggle with debilitating kidney failure. From the time he was a teenager, he has received outstanding medical care, allowing him the comfort of knowing he can fix these issues. At the age of fifteen I witnessed my father receive a kidney transplant. He had skilled surgeons and doctors who have carefully worked the game of tricking his body into accepting his new kidney, which has worked until now. He currently has three separate types of kidney rejection, and he now faces his second transplant at the age of fifty-two, making him eight years younger than the Bolivian man who had received his first simple physical examination. These two people represent a stark contrast of the medical reality our world faces. My dad was fortunate to receive such great care, but, had been born in Bolivia, he would have died at the age of twenty-three, the age his kidney failed for the first time.

As a freshman I embarked on a trip to Boston for a medical conference for teenagers. My main goal was to learn more about a potential career in medicine. I sat in my chair and watched a video about obstetric fistula, a hole that forms in the wall of the bladder during childbirth. This defect had been eradicated in the United States in 1880, but still exists in Africa as a result of early marriage and childbirth. These women were lucky to have found a compound for women where they could live free of shame. Others had not been so lucky; they were left alone in their huts to do chores with no hope of recovery because their husbands would not travel the weeklong journey to the one hospital in Niger. This hospital had only one surgeon for thousands of people, showing a stark contrast to the medical care available in the United States where childbirth is relatively controlled in hospitals of by midwifes.

While in Bolivia I had the opportunity to witness volunteer medical professionals train doctors and change the lives of over 100 children and adults, such as the aforementioned man. I walked through the intimidating process with this man and witnessed firsthand the impact of Operation Smile. The couple who founded this organization twenty-five years earlier, Bill and Kathy McGee, was young and saw something they could help fix-the limited access to cleft lip and palate care in the Philippines. I have observed the profound change that one couple can make to millions of lives. I believe that one person has the power to inspire another, and the ripple effect will cause a change throughout the world.

My experience with the people of Bolivia and my involvement with Operation Smile shaped my goals dramatically. I had the opportunity to see the gap between health care in the United States and that in Bolivia. I have found my passion in helping those who cannot help themselves. Through Operation Smile I have also learned that if I do something I am passionate about, I have the capacity to accomplish more than I could ever imagine. Passion empowers change. Entering a health related field would enable me to follow my passion and help bring medical care to people such as the man I met in Bolivia. It would empower me to make a difference and although I could never help everyone, I can use a health related field to help some people and hopefully in doing that inspire others to do the same. As an aspiring physician, I will strive to bring health care to those who cannot access it. I have witnessed the benefits of even a simple physical exam and I strongly aim to provide satisfactory health care to people in underserved areas similar to the rural Bolivia I encountered.

EF_Susan - / 2310  
Oct 14, 2011   #2
He stood out to me because he was an old man lost in a sea of children.

He had skilled surgeons and doctors who have carefully worked the game of tricking his body into accepting his new kidney, which has worked until now.

As a freshman, I embarked on a trip to Boston for a medical conference for teenagers.

... a stark contrast to the medical care available in the United States where childbirth is relatively controlled in hospitals or by midwifes.

While in Bolivia, I had the opportunity to witness volunteer medical professionals...

My experience with the people of Bolivia and my involvement with Operation Smile has shaped my goals dramatically.

This is a very well written essay, interesting and clear. Good luck in school!

:)
OP premed123 2 / 3  
Oct 21, 2011   #3
There is no word limit. Thanks for the feedback. Any more is well apreciated.


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