I like my essay idea very much, but I am afraid that the main idea behind my experience may be a bit obscure. It may backfire if it is. Let me knwo how you feel.. Any other comments are also very much appreciated.
Topic: Stanford students are widely known to possess a sense of intellectual vitality. Tell us about an idea or an experience you have had that you find intellectually engaging. (250 word maximum)
Title: Looking down the Second Floor
I stood on the second floor of my school by the window. School had just ended. I looked on as little figures scurried about. People-watching was one of my favorite pastimes. I watched how they moved, and interacted with one another. I liked to imagine what they were thinking, what they were feeling. Their pasts, their futures, their relationships.
There was something about being on that second floor. I felt different from all the others: a passive observer, staring down at the little objects running about. Perhaps even a bit like a deity. Below me were hundreds of little sheep, unaware of flock they were part of. A bubbly teen. A football jock. A weary teacher.
A blonde girl.
She was seated on the benches outside under the trees, seemed to be staring right at me. "What was she thinking?" I thought. We held our gaze, like weary knights trying to outstare their opponent. Could she be playing the same game as I? I decided that she was.
Suddenly, I no longer felt I was on the second floor. I was suddenly outside, staring at her face to face. The crowd swept by around us as our showdown continued. Eternity ticked away. Finally I broke off the stare and turned around.
I was back on the second floor, but felt a sudden unease of disbelonging. The halls were silent and filled with nothingness. The classrooms were dark, the teachers having already left. There was no longer a reason for me to stay upstairs.
I opened the double doors next to the window. I transcended the stairs and immersed myself in the crowd.
Topic: Stanford students are widely known to possess a sense of intellectual vitality. Tell us about an idea or an experience you have had that you find intellectually engaging. (250 word maximum)
Title: Looking down the Second Floor
I stood on the second floor of my school by the window. School had just ended. I looked on as little figures scurried about. People-watching was one of my favorite pastimes. I watched how they moved, and interacted with one another. I liked to imagine what they were thinking, what they were feeling. Their pasts, their futures, their relationships.
There was something about being on that second floor. I felt different from all the others: a passive observer, staring down at the little objects running about. Perhaps even a bit like a deity. Below me were hundreds of little sheep, unaware of flock they were part of. A bubbly teen. A football jock. A weary teacher.
A blonde girl.
She was seated on the benches outside under the trees, seemed to be staring right at me. "What was she thinking?" I thought. We held our gaze, like weary knights trying to outstare their opponent. Could she be playing the same game as I? I decided that she was.
Suddenly, I no longer felt I was on the second floor. I was suddenly outside, staring at her face to face. The crowd swept by around us as our showdown continued. Eternity ticked away. Finally I broke off the stare and turned around.
I was back on the second floor, but felt a sudden unease of disbelonging. The halls were silent and filled with nothingness. The classrooms were dark, the teachers having already left. There was no longer a reason for me to stay upstairs.
I opened the double doors next to the window. I transcended the stairs and immersed myself in the crowd.