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prompt: Stanford students possess an intellectual vitality. Reflect on an idea or experience that has been important to your intellectual development.
There are two prevailing theories regarding the process of evolution here on Earth. On one hand, there are those who support Cuvier and his catastrophism theory, which states that change came about through major catastrophes, such as droughts and earthquakes. On the other hand, there are those that believe in James Hutton's gradualism theory, which states that profound change can take place through the cumulative effect of slow but continuous processes.
I had always believed that my life followed Hutton's gradualism theory, after all, the whole point of my schooling has been to grow and learn each day. However, I have learned that real change often takes place catastrophically, one moment that changes our ideal, perspective, persona for a lifetime, for better or worse.
This theory of change is evident in many aspects of my life, none, though, as prominent right now as my time with Dr. Watanabe, head professor at the UNCW aquaculture facility. I had started my work with Dr. Watanabe as a marine scientist, one that wanted to make a lasting impact on the environment. At the facility, I helped strip-spawn fish, research polymers and their effects on the coagulation of waste particles, and even got to harvest fish to be sold to the local seafood vender. It was during my time at the facility that Dr. Watanabe told me something that I truly found remarkable. He said, "Stephen, if you really want to make an impact on the marine ecosystem, I don't think you should become a scientist. What this field needs is a business savvy leader to take charge and make sure these advances we're making are put to use. Stephen, everything is business."
I was taken aback by his brutal honesty; it came out of nowhere. Yet it made perfect since to me, he had seen how captivated I was by Dr. Dumas, a business professor at UNCW, and my work with him on setting market prices for the fish I had helped harvest. The more I thought about it, the more I realized Dr. Watanabe was right; there are plenty of brilliant marine scientists out there making ground-breaking discoveries every year. However, there is still no leader on the commercial side of marine science to take these advances to market, where they will benefit the national economy and environment.
The effect of this catastrophe: I want to be a businessman with a background in marine science to take the works in marine science and bring them to the public, a champion of marine science in the business sector. Who says you have to be a doctor or a scientist to make a major difference in this country!
prompt: Stanford students possess an intellectual vitality. Reflect on an idea or experience that has been important to your intellectual development.
There are two prevailing theories regarding the process of evolution here on Earth. On one hand, there are those who support Cuvier and his catastrophism theory, which states that change came about through major catastrophes, such as droughts and earthquakes. On the other hand, there are those that believe in James Hutton's gradualism theory, which states that profound change can take place through the cumulative effect of slow but continuous processes.
I had always believed that my life followed Hutton's gradualism theory, after all, the whole point of my schooling has been to grow and learn each day. However, I have learned that real change often takes place catastrophically, one moment that changes our ideal, perspective, persona for a lifetime, for better or worse.
This theory of change is evident in many aspects of my life, none, though, as prominent right now as my time with Dr. Watanabe, head professor at the UNCW aquaculture facility. I had started my work with Dr. Watanabe as a marine scientist, one that wanted to make a lasting impact on the environment. At the facility, I helped strip-spawn fish, research polymers and their effects on the coagulation of waste particles, and even got to harvest fish to be sold to the local seafood vender. It was during my time at the facility that Dr. Watanabe told me something that I truly found remarkable. He said, "Stephen, if you really want to make an impact on the marine ecosystem, I don't think you should become a scientist. What this field needs is a business savvy leader to take charge and make sure these advances we're making are put to use. Stephen, everything is business."
I was taken aback by his brutal honesty; it came out of nowhere. Yet it made perfect since to me, he had seen how captivated I was by Dr. Dumas, a business professor at UNCW, and my work with him on setting market prices for the fish I had helped harvest. The more I thought about it, the more I realized Dr. Watanabe was right; there are plenty of brilliant marine scientists out there making ground-breaking discoveries every year. However, there is still no leader on the commercial side of marine science to take these advances to market, where they will benefit the national economy and environment.
The effect of this catastrophe: I want to be a businessman with a background in marine science to take the works in marine science and bring them to the public, a champion of marine science in the business sector. Who says you have to be a doctor or a scientist to make a major difference in this country!
