Hello! I'm looking for lots of feedback on this essay for my Emerson College transfer application. I'm not much of a writer, which I'm sure is apparent, so I'd like feedback, anything from grammar to content. Thank you!
Essay question: If you were to write a story about your life, what would you title it and why? (100-200 words)
Nobody Knows Who I Am, and Neither Do I! Since I was old enough to understand the simple phrase "just be yourself." I've been trying to answer the question; well who am I? I've been through an absurd amount of phases. From when I all but convinced myself that I could become a pro tennis player, to that regrettable year in middle school where I layered my jet black, box-dyed hair and wore a fake lip ring because that was the "real me" and no one was going to tell me otherwise. The truth is, I still struggle with answering that question and I probably will for a long time. Sure, I've had experiences that have ultimately shaped my personality, and I know what I want and who I don't aspire to be, but I'm not ready to boil my whole identity down to a single phrase just yet. When I figure it out, I'll be more than happy to scream it from the mountaintops, but until then I've got a lot of self-exploration to do.
Essay question: If you were to write a story about your life, what would you title it and why? (100-200 words)
Nobody Knows Who I Am, and Neither Do I! Since I was old enough to understand the simple phrase "just be yourself." I've been trying to answer the question; well who am I? I've been through an absurd amount of phases. From when I all but convinced myself that I could become a pro tennis player, to that regrettable year in middle school where I layered my jet black, box-dyed hair and wore a fake lip ring because that was the "real me" and no one was going to tell me otherwise. The truth is, I still struggle with answering that question and I probably will for a long time. Sure, I've had experiences that have ultimately shaped my personality, and I know what I want and who I don't aspire to be, but I'm not ready to boil my whole identity down to a single phrase just yet. When I figure it out, I'll be more than happy to scream it from the mountaintops, but until then I've got a lot of self-exploration to do.