English, my favorite subject; University of Toronto SAF

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*What is your favourite subject and why? (100 words or less)
My favourite subject is Literatures In English because it allows me to discover the writing talent of so many intellectuals in the world. It has enabled me to be more analytical and comprehensive in all other aspects of my life. This subject has given me a chance to explore so many interesting ideas, theories and points of view and has contributed to my overall growth as an individual. I have been able to develop my writing ability, broaden my perspective on various issues and build an understanding of the many dimensions of the human experience.

*Why are you interested in this program? (100 words or less)
I believe that having the opportunity to study International Studies would help me to broaden my perspective on the world. It would allow me to gain an understanding on the diverse global forces that have transformed our world into what it is today. This program covers a wide range of subjects that grasp my interest and I think that it would enable me to develop my communication skills. I believe that this program would enable me to be a part of the growing global community and play an active role in its development.

*What experiences and skills might you bring to this field? (100 words or less)
I believe that my exposure to different languages has assisted me in developing my excellent verbal and written communication skills which would be an asset to this field. My experience at school has allowed me to develop my interpersonal and leadership skills and I would say that it has also helped me to be a good team player. I think that I have good problem solving skills and I am able to work under pressure. I am also very adaptable and I have great initiative to be successful at whatever I undertake.

*Please describe your writing and communication skills, indicating particular strengths or weaknesses (100 words or less):
I believe that my verbal and written communication skills are excellent. Due to my study of Modern Languages in school, I think that I have developed an intense interest in communication. My essay writing skills are particularly strong since I have good structure, strong ideas and my language is fluent. However, my weaknesses would include being over analytical and too wordy. Nevertheless, my strengths surpass these and I am able to clearly send my message across to my audience.

try to use less I believes. for example intead of saying I believe that my exposure to different languages - be more confident say something like -

My exposure to different languages has assisted me in developing my excellent verbal and written communication skills

If you use I believe to many times it sounds like you are not confident in what you are saying.

It has enabled me to be more analytical and comprehensive in all other aspects of my life, because I analyze people around me in the same way I analyze fictional characters. ... or something like that. Give an explanation of what you mean.

I agree that it will be better with less I believes!
I believe that having the opportunity to study International Studies would help me...

I believe that m My exposure to different languages has assisted me in developing my ...

You do have good, clear structure! :-)

wow... i really say "i believe" too often... thanks!!

*Describe in more detail the responsibilities and skills you developed (100 words or less):
At the Autistic Society of Trinidad and Tobago, I had to work with various children at music therapy, art therapy and many motor skills development activities. My experience has enabled me to be more self-assertive and self-confident since I was able to develop my leadership skills while working with different individuals. I have become a good team-player and have learnt the value of good interpersonal and communication skills when working with people of different backgrounds. Volunteering has helped me to mature faster and to gain a sense of social responsibility which has contributed to my overall development as an individual.