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St. Olaf College is a learning community that draws on the talents and perspectives of students and faculty with a variety of backgrounds and a wide range of interests. What has led you to apply, and how will St. Olaf College help you pursue your passions?
St. Olaf's emphasis on students' global perspective attracts me most. I was reared at an isolated village in China. Shut away in a relatively monotonous environment, I was eager to explore the outside world. Actually, I never stop searching for communities with diversities and global perspective because associating with people of different citizenship, traditions and religions is a precious experience to me. Through my constant efforts and striving, I am now studying in a big city well known for its internationalization. After meeting different people with distinctive background and perspective and after benefiting from those interactions both academically and socially, I feel strongly that I need to better achieve my potential in a college with a broad scope, thus St. Olaf's commitment to world citizens is exactly what I need.
I hope to pursue my career in environmental science. St. Olaf's strength on environmental studies and dedication to sustainability are an irresistible attraction to me. Environmental science in St. Olaf will certainly make me a qualified environmentalist with its combination of broad and focused perspectives on environmental problems and issues. I have been fascinated by the project like Environmental Science in Australia, not only because of the chance to learn more about Australia but also because of the extensive field experiences and strong interdisciplinary focus provided. In St. Olaf, learning experience will be especially enlightening and meaningful for me because of the global perspective in campus. Environmental problem is never something local or regional. It involves different aspects that are related to the whole planet. In this sense, studying and exploring the environmental problem with global perspectives are indispensable and exciting.
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St. Olaf College is a learning community that draws on the talents and perspectives of students and faculty with a variety of backgrounds and a wide range of interests. What has led you to apply, and how will St. Olaf College help you pursue your passions?
St. Olaf's emphasis on students' global perspective attracts me most. I was reared at an isolated village in China. Shut away in a relatively monotonous environment, I was eager to explore the outside world. Actually, I never stop searching for communities with diversities and global perspective because associating with people of different citizenship, traditions and religions is a precious experience to me. Through my constant efforts and striving, I am now studying in a big city well known for its internationalization. After meeting different people with distinctive background and perspective and after benefiting from those interactions both academically and socially, I feel strongly that I need to better achieve my potential in a college with a broad scope, thus St. Olaf's commitment to world citizens is exactly what I need.
I hope to pursue my career in environmental science. St. Olaf's strength on environmental studies and dedication to sustainability are an irresistible attraction to me. Environmental science in St. Olaf will certainly make me a qualified environmentalist with its combination of broad and focused perspectives on environmental problems and issues. I have been fascinated by the project like Environmental Science in Australia, not only because of the chance to learn more about Australia but also because of the extensive field experiences and strong interdisciplinary focus provided. In St. Olaf, learning experience will be especially enlightening and meaningful for me because of the global perspective in campus. Environmental problem is never something local or regional. It involves different aspects that are related to the whole planet. In this sense, studying and exploring the environmental problem with global perspectives are indispensable and exciting.
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