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My faith and my education; Azusa Pacific U Christian Environment



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Feb 21, 2013   #1
They said 500 words or less, but this is only 187 words.

Prompt: We'd love to know more about you! Please briefly describe why APU's Christian environment appeals to you in 500 words or less.

Being a Christian, I have two driving forces in my life. My faith and my education. Throughout my life, I have been enrolled in public schools. I didn't mind attending public schools, but I would have loved to attend Christian school-had my parents enough money to do so. Going to public schools, indeed, had its advantages and disadvantages. One of the advantages is being able to spread my faith to nonbelievers and curious bystanders on my campus. Through my knowledge, I was able to share the great things that come out of having a relationship with Jesus. Having the chance to invite some of the students from my school my church is a great sense of gratification-especially since they didn't normally go to church. The downside was having to experience the ignorance some students had about my belief and who my Savior was. Now, as I prepare to graduate high school, I'm granted the opportunity I wasn't able to have, which is, attending a Christian school. I aspire to attend Azusa Pacific University where students-like myself-want to grow academically and spiritually.

dumi 1 / 6793  
Feb 21, 2013   #2
I didn't mind attending public schools, but I would have loved to attend Christian school-had my parents enough money to do so.

...if my parents had enough means

One of the advantages is being able to spread my faith to nonbelievers andbeing a curious bystanderson my campus.

...

Having the chance to invite some of the students from my school to my church is a great sense of gratification

-especially since they didn't normally go to church

I wish you used comma for the punctuation here

Overall, I find this is well written... I wish you change punctuation to commas :)


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