Hi guys, please help me improve my UC prompt 1. I appreciate any suggestions and advice.
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Prompt : Describe the world you come from - for example, your family, community or school - and tell us how your world has shaped your dreams and aspirations.
I don't want to live for someone else's dream; I want to stand on my own. I want to "Stay Hungry and Foolish." (Steve Jobs)
My parent's always wanted me to work on our family business. As I never objected to their dream, it became an expectation - and soon an obligation. I never gave a thought to what I wanted to be.
My family moved to USA four years ago so that me and my brother could obtain a better education. I didn't want to come, and my first couple years in America were hopeless - I couldn't leave India behind. I didn't want to adjust to this new country, so I lived in the virtual world of Runescape, a computer game.
After being an introvert for the first year and a half in High School, I started getting involved in tennis and school. I quit Runescape and started socializing. America wasn't as bad as I made it seem, and I made a lot of friends in a short time.
As I got to know more people, I noticed a trend. All the teenager's - my new friends, my American cousins, and my classmates- had something in common : they had dreams they wanted to pursue. My brother became my idol because he had gotten into the college and career of his choice. If he did it, why can't I? Everyone, even the adults, around me had dreams and ambitions. It didn't matter whether they were rich or poor, genius or challenged, or successful or not. They were all hungry - never satisfied with the knowledge they had - and foolish - wanting to learn more and more. I wanted to be like that as well.
I started thinking about what I liked and what I was good at. My teacher's helped me a lot to understand myself, and encouraged and guided me to choose a career of my liking. Mrs. Shelton, my science teacher, was my favorite because she spent extra hours just talking to me about my future and answering my questions. My friends inspired me to explore my life and work hard towards my goals. My family was happy to know that I wanted to be something. My mother, surprised but happy with my change, provided me with all the love and support that I needed to succeed. My brother; well, he is my idol. It is due to everyone that I am the person I am today.
I have matured a lot in the last two years. I have become independent, responsible and ambitious; I have discovered the person I am. I love science, math, and economics. Therefore, after much research, I have narrowed down my career options to engineering and economics. However, whatever it may be, I want to learn more and more as I'll always be hungry and foolish.
Thank You Very Much !
Prompt : Describe the world you come from - for example, your family, community or school - and tell us how your world has shaped your dreams and aspirations.
I don't want to live for someone else's dream; I want to stand on my own. I want to "Stay Hungry and Foolish." (Steve Jobs)
My parent's always wanted me to work on our family business. As I never objected to their dream, it became an expectation - and soon an obligation. I never gave a thought to what I wanted to be.
My family moved to USA four years ago so that me and my brother could obtain a better education. I didn't want to come, and my first couple years in America were hopeless - I couldn't leave India behind. I didn't want to adjust to this new country, so I lived in the virtual world of Runescape, a computer game.
After being an introvert for the first year and a half in High School, I started getting involved in tennis and school. I quit Runescape and started socializing. America wasn't as bad as I made it seem, and I made a lot of friends in a short time.
As I got to know more people, I noticed a trend. All the teenager's - my new friends, my American cousins, and my classmates- had something in common : they had dreams they wanted to pursue. My brother became my idol because he had gotten into the college and career of his choice. If he did it, why can't I? Everyone, even the adults, around me had dreams and ambitions. It didn't matter whether they were rich or poor, genius or challenged, or successful or not. They were all hungry - never satisfied with the knowledge they had - and foolish - wanting to learn more and more. I wanted to be like that as well.
I started thinking about what I liked and what I was good at. My teacher's helped me a lot to understand myself, and encouraged and guided me to choose a career of my liking. Mrs. Shelton, my science teacher, was my favorite because she spent extra hours just talking to me about my future and answering my questions. My friends inspired me to explore my life and work hard towards my goals. My family was happy to know that I wanted to be something. My mother, surprised but happy with my change, provided me with all the love and support that I needed to succeed. My brother; well, he is my idol. It is due to everyone that I am the person I am today.
I have matured a lot in the last two years. I have become independent, responsible and ambitious; I have discovered the person I am. I love science, math, and economics. Therefore, after much research, I have narrowed down my career options to engineering and economics. However, whatever it may be, I want to learn more and more as I'll always be hungry and foolish.