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I want to be a farmer- Cornell College of Agriculture and Life Sciences essay



Snake 1 / 3  
Dec 28, 2011   #1
College of Agriculture and Life Sciences:
How have your interests and related experiences influenced your selection of major? (Max 500 words)

Before graduation, my classmates were discussing what they planned to do in future. Some wanted to be doctors, others engineers or pharmacists or researchers.

"So what do you want to do?" I was asked.

"Me? I want to study agriculture. I'm going to be a farmer."

Looks of incredulity ensued. Here in modern Singapore, farmers are almost as rare as unicorns- only about one percent of land area is used for agricultural purposes [1].

My interest in nature began at a very young age, when I would capture any insect unlucky enough to stumble into our apartment and study them for hours. When I was eight, my family moved to our current address, and there was a large plot of unused land just across the road. It was my first experience with wilderness. The grass was long and untamed, and my imagination filled it with all sorts of wonderful creatures from snakes to wild deer. From November to January in each year, little egrets would flock here and stalk about with their heads held high.

Now, the former grassland is filled with half a dozen buildings, and more are under construction.

No, I am not going to wax lyrical about the loss of nature and urban sprawl, because it is almost certainly inevitable. There is too little space for too many people, and so we chop down the trees. We mow the grass and stir the earth before planting skyscrapers.

I am grateful, however, for the happiness brought to me by that grassland in childhood, when I ran around looking for four-leaf clovers, terrifying moths and filling my pockets with fluffy pink flowers of mimosa. I am a born and bred city girl, but that grassy playground brought me to a different world.

And now, as someone taking my first steps into adulthood, I realize that I don't want to spend the rest of my life in an office cubicle. My childhood dream of living in a house with a backyard where I can grow my own plants has slowly morphed into an ambition for being a farmer.

I understand that being a farmer is not just about prancing in the fields and sleeping under the stars. It is hard work. However, most jobs are hard work. What matters is doing work that, despite being tiring, I can still enjoy.

In China, where I was born, few people want to be farmers. Those living in rural areas try their very best to leave their farms behind, entering the cities in search of low-wage jobs as factory workers. This is because being farmers pay even less. In today's world, where food consumption far exceeds food shortage, I believe that it is time for a new breed of farmers who understand science and technologies as well as they understand crops and animals. And where else to learn that than at Cornell, which literally "grew up on the farm", and has one of the best college in agriculture and life sciences in the world?

[1] Singapore Department of Statistics, Yearbook of Statistics Singapore, 2011. (2011). Agriculture, animal production and fisheries.

Please provide feedback! Especially on the ending, which I find kind of weak, if you have any ideas how to better bring in Cornell please help! Thanks a lot and good luck everyone :)

its_spacely - / 13  
Dec 28, 2011   #2
I really love the way you transition from modern events to a mini background of yourself, it ensures your essay is personal. Your acceptance of the way things will be - "No, I am not going to wax lyrical about the loss of nature and urban sprawl, because it is almost certainly inevitable. There is too little space for too many people, and so we chop down the trees. We mow the grass and stir the earth before planting skyscrapers." - shows you are not too blind to reality, and I think this can only show maturity to the admissions officers really. I think the ending is very good, and can only really offer advice for a bit more flow - "Those living in rural areas try their very best to leave their farms behind, entering the cities in search of low-wage jobs as factory workers, because being farmers pay even less." This isn't a big change so it's probably only for cosmetic reasons that you might want to change this, although I do think you've got the content perfect and the lack of grammatical/spelling errors is a bonus!
arianna_muv 8 / 15  
Dec 28, 2011   #3
when I would capture any insect unlucky enough to stumble into our apartment and study it for hours.
This is because being farmers pays even less.
Essay overall is nice but im not really getting a sense of how youre love for animals transformed into a desire to be a farmer, but maybe thats just me.


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