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What is your favorite word and why? - Honesty



Utau4928 5 / 17  
Dec 10, 2013   #1
What is your favorite word and why? Answer the question in a half page or roughly 250 words

Any feedback, critics and correction will be needed. Thank you

Disappointed face, vexed expressions. These are reactions of people who just discovered that someone had lie to them. Since I was little, my family has always taught me to be an honest person, a person with values. Still, there were some times that I lied because I was afraid that my family would reprimand me, but my family always ended angrier due to my dishonesty. When I became more matured I set a goal: become a completely honest person. While ostensibly it sounds impossible, actually it is viable. This is not only viable, but necessary. Nowadays, honesty is one of the many values that we have lost. There are deceivers and counterfeit object everywhere. Just as Noel Coward said: "It is discouraging how many people are shocked by honesty and how few by deceit" This is really sad because you can't trust anyone. You don't know if you are facing with a liar or an honest person. Honesty is crucial in this world. With this value, we can avoid a lot of conflict. Moreover, we can overcome obstacles. The time has come, we should rescue the values that we have left behind and hence build a better world.

Did you already know my favorite word?
Yes, you're right! My favorite word is honesty.

dumi 1 / 6793  
Dec 11, 2013   #2
These are reactions of people who just discovered that someone had lie to them

These are the reactions of people who just discovered someone else's betrayal or dishonesty.

Since I was little, my family has always taught me to be an honest person, a person with values.

My family took a great interest in bringing me up to be an honest person.

Still, there were some times that I lied because I was afraid that my family would reprimand me, but my family always ended angrier due to my dishonesty.

You need to improve the presentation of this sentence. It does not flow well :(
JfryKenanga 1 / 2  
Dec 11, 2013   #3
The using of the sentence is a bit complicated and jumpy.
michael_brand1 2 / 2  
Dec 11, 2013   #4
When I became more matured

I'd think "As I matured" would work better? Sounds a bit odd to me

actually it is viable

Also, I believe "it is actually" would fit better
OP Utau4928 5 / 17  
Dec 13, 2013   #5
dumi
Thank you for the corrections. Can you tell me what do you think about the whole essay? is it good? or should I write another one?
OP Utau4928 5 / 17  
Dec 13, 2013   #6
michael_brand1
Thank you for your advice.
What was your impression when you finished reading my essay?


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