So, I'm applying to Virginia Tech and was wondering if I could get any pointers to what I think is a very bland essay.
If there is something you think would be beneficial for the Admissions Committee to know as we review your academic history, please take this opportunity to explain. (Limit 250 words)
My mom and I are the first generation of immigrants from Russia. When we first arrived here 8 years ago, both of us spoke no English. My mom, who is my ultimate role model, never crumbled under the pressure on her shoulders, and after four years here enrolled herself in a university to further pursue her education. However, with her limited English, I was often her translator, helping her write essays and papers for class, in result neglecting my own education. In retrospect, however, this is what sparked my interest in higher learning- I had never intended to go to college, so imagine my shock when I found myself absorbed in the works of Freud, Heider, and Jung. After her graduation in the summer of 2010, I had a personal renaissance. I awoke my passion for learning, and refocused myself to prove to those who had stopped having faith in me that I was more than a mediocre and phlegmatic flop. I spent a lot of time lost at the bottom of the ocean, with no light of hope touching upon me. Now, however, I see that the world is my oyster, and intend to put all my dreams in motion and seize the immense opportunity my mother has given me to succeed in life.
If there is something you think would be beneficial for the Admissions Committee to know as we review your academic history, please take this opportunity to explain. (Limit 250 words)
My mom and I are the first generation of immigrants from Russia. When we first arrived here 8 years ago, both of us spoke no English. My mom, who is my ultimate role model, never crumbled under the pressure on her shoulders, and after four years here enrolled herself in a university to further pursue her education. However, with her limited English, I was often her translator, helping her write essays and papers for class, in result neglecting my own education. In retrospect, however, this is what sparked my interest in higher learning- I had never intended to go to college, so imagine my shock when I found myself absorbed in the works of Freud, Heider, and Jung. After her graduation in the summer of 2010, I had a personal renaissance. I awoke my passion for learning, and refocused myself to prove to those who had stopped having faith in me that I was more than a mediocre and phlegmatic flop. I spent a lot of time lost at the bottom of the ocean, with no light of hope touching upon me. Now, however, I see that the world is my oyster, and intend to put all my dreams in motion and seize the immense opportunity my mother has given me to succeed in life.
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