So this is my essay for the extracurric. common app short essay, please let me know what you think.
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Being a member of the Girls Inc. Advocating Change Together program is an experience that I have held in high regard. Through the interactive workshops, I changed from an unassertive and self-conscious individual to someone capable of voicing out their opinions. The program opened my eyes to a new perspective of the world around me. I addressed local issues around healthy eating at schools and female youth such as teen pregnancy and self-image. The collaborative projects were new to me because I have always done things individually but I enjoyed being a part of a team, sharing insight. When challenged, I have become a better problem-solver with the ability to think critically. I had the opportunity to network with the girls and community leaders enhancing my communication skills to form supportive relationships. Girls Inc. provided me a positive environment that I needed most and helped me develop into a more confident and head-strong person without any doubt in all that is possible.
Thank you in advance to those who help check my essay. Critical opinions are encouraged.
Being a member of the Girls Inc. Advocating Change Together program is an experience that I have held in high regard. Through the interactive workshops, I changed from an unassertive and self-conscious individual to someone capable of voicing out their opinions. The program opened my eyes to a new perspective of the world around me. I addressed local issues around healthy eating at schools and female youth such as teen pregnancy and self-image. The collaborative projects were new to me because I have always done things individually but I enjoyed being a part of a team, sharing insight. When challenged, I have become a better problem-solver with the ability to think critically. I had the opportunity to network with the girls and community leaders enhancing my communication skills to form supportive relationships. Girls Inc. provided me a positive environment that I needed most and helped me develop into a more confident and head-strong person without any doubt in all that is possible.
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