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Gryffindor Brave/ Most important characteristic of a person for him to be successful



Helen Song 1 / -  
Jun 20, 2013   #1
In your opinion, what is the most important characteristic (for example, honestly, intelligence, a sense of humor) that a person can have to be successful in life? Use specific reasons and examples from your experience to explain your answer. When you write your answer, you are not limited to the examples listed in the question

As someone said, " Brave is the most important characteristic in the world." I absolutely agree with it.

If a person cannot be brave enough to do anything, he will never get success. One of my favorite books is Harry Potter, which is written by J.K. Rowling. It is told a story about the boy who lived Harry Potter. And it is the reason why the book called Harry Potter. Harry's parents died because of some accidents when he was just a baby. And Harry grew up with his aunt and his uncle, the Dursley family, with unequal treatment. When he became 11 years old, he found he was a wizard and he never knew it before. Harry learned that's as a baby he witnessed his parents' murder by the power-obsessed dark wizard, Lord Voldemort, who then attempted to kill him also. For some reasons, because of the love of Lily, Voldemort could not kill Harry. Harry survived with a lightning-shaped scar on his forehead as a memento of the attack, and Voldemort disappeared.

It was a mistake Harry always thought about that he maybe come to wrong place. He should be a Slytherin not a Gryffindor. It had confused him for a long time. But In my opinion, from the beginning of all the stories, Harry choose Gryffindor not Slytherin means that he is the person who have Gryffindor brave and always performs it when he meets troubles.

In the first book Harry Potter and the Philosopher's Stone Harry met his best friends Ron Wesley and Hermione Granger in the train on the way to Hogwarts. They found that Voldemort yearned to gain the power of the Philosopher's stone, a substance that would give everlasting life. When faced to Voldemort, people choose not to say his name, Harry said his name without fair and destroyed him secondly.

And in the other seven books, Harry faced Voldemort every semester. He could give up his life to save people who he loved and who he did not love, like Ginny, Sirius Black and so on. He lost his parents when he was just a little baby and sometimes he would envy someone who had parents and thought about what if his parents would not die. But he would be responsible for defeating Voldemort in the end. He was never afraid of whatever he faced. And he became hero who defeated Voldemort at last. I think the reason why he can overcome the dark lord Voldemort is brave. What matter he will face, he is never afraid.

I love Harry Potter so much, and I love each person in this book with different reasons. And the reason why I love Harry Potter not only he is the protagonist in Harry Potter but also he is brave enough to overcome any trouble he face.

Gryffindor brave.

And it is also the reason from the beginning of the entire thing Harry lived from Voldemort.

shadman19922 21 / 74  
Jun 20, 2013   #2
This essay is replete with grammatical problems.

As for the response to the topic, there is a HUGE problem with content. You started of with an assertion, but instead of elaborating you presented a bunch of facts from the Harry Potter series. What you should have done is present each example, explain how it builds up on your point and how it is related to your ideas.

This essay is weak. Any admissions officer reading this essay would be annoyed straight away. My advice is you read a plethora of sample essays and rewrite your response from scratch.
dumi 1 / 6793  
Jun 24, 2013   #3
If a person cannot be brave enough to do anything, he will never get success

If a person is not brave enough to take up challenges, he will be far from reaching success.

It is told a story about the boy who lived Harry Potter

... this sentence is not grammatically correct,
It tells a story about a boy named Harry Potter.

As for the response to the topic, there is a HUGE problem with content. You started of with an assertion, but instead of elaborating you presented a bunch of facts from the Harry Potter series. What you should have done is present each example, explain how it builds up on your point and how it is related to your ideas.

.... this is very good advice by shadman. Yes, your response goes out of topic. Follow what shadman suggests!


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