This is only first draft, without grammar correction, I know it has a lot of mistakes. I mean how's about ideas and impression in two drafts. I want to know which one is better or more suitable for topic "Turning point in life" So, I can put my effort on only one.
This is for Stanford exchange program. Please help me it's really important for me...
Also, how to write it smooth and beautiful. I'm not the english native, Please advice! Any ideas are very appreciated
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Have you ever think about someone, appear like a magic, make an unexpected turning point and change your life forever as a dream come true. You will be so lucky if have that chance. Unfortunately, I have to tell I'm lucky too. But it is because I never have that chance. My turning point was not suddenly appear. I proud to tell, it came from efforts, devotions and duration of time. My turning point is not a sharp peak graph of life but it is smooth beautiful curve that adjust my life turn into succeed every goal of life. That is my love of reading.
When I was young, my parents read for me every night. My home fulfilled of variety type of books. Beginning from enjoyed to listen bedtime story, I began to read for my own and I could read faster than other children. Books give me not only knowledge but also many useful skills such as can focus or concentrate with work for long time or survive my school and university life with good studying. Also, reading gives me endless imagination and happiness which no where else can have. Reading makes me have a lot of friends. Reading makes me know I'm never alone and I love to share my experience through reading with friends. We tell and listen, query and answer, and that make us closer. Reading teach me give me good attitude and good example. I never think my life without reading. It will be nightmare. Everything will finish slower and harder without reading. For me reading give me know who I really am, give me source of information and inspiration for my future. Reading makes me appreciate how much love from my parents. Reading is root to my mind and blossom in my soul and I never live without it forever. So, love of reading is the most important turning point in my life.
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I want to be a scientist, work in laboratory since I was young. But when it came true during my studying. I feel not comfort and lost my attention to it. But one day, professor asked all class why everybody has to come to studying. Why everybody has to lock ourselves up in the square room call laboratory. Doing correct but don't realize what are we doing. I suddenly understand all the reason of my unenergetic and unhappy. I never prepare myself for studying well enough so, I don't know what to do and what I gain in everday. Now I knew the key to lives that not only set goal but also really want to know! If I want to know, I will happy to learn or do anything. Give my heart in goal and I will get more than I hope.This is my important turning point because I believe turning point came when I realized who I am, what my mistake were in the past, and what I want to do in the future. And this give me all of that!
Thank you!!
This is for Stanford exchange program. Please help me it's really important for me...
Also, how to write it smooth and beautiful. I'm not the english native, Please advice! Any ideas are very appreciated
1.
Have you ever think about someone, appear like a magic, make an unexpected turning point and change your life forever as a dream come true. You will be so lucky if have that chance. Unfortunately, I have to tell I'm lucky too. But it is because I never have that chance. My turning point was not suddenly appear. I proud to tell, it came from efforts, devotions and duration of time. My turning point is not a sharp peak graph of life but it is smooth beautiful curve that adjust my life turn into succeed every goal of life. That is my love of reading.
When I was young, my parents read for me every night. My home fulfilled of variety type of books. Beginning from enjoyed to listen bedtime story, I began to read for my own and I could read faster than other children. Books give me not only knowledge but also many useful skills such as can focus or concentrate with work for long time or survive my school and university life with good studying. Also, reading gives me endless imagination and happiness which no where else can have. Reading makes me have a lot of friends. Reading makes me know I'm never alone and I love to share my experience through reading with friends. We tell and listen, query and answer, and that make us closer. Reading teach me give me good attitude and good example. I never think my life without reading. It will be nightmare. Everything will finish slower and harder without reading. For me reading give me know who I really am, give me source of information and inspiration for my future. Reading makes me appreciate how much love from my parents. Reading is root to my mind and blossom in my soul and I never live without it forever. So, love of reading is the most important turning point in my life.
2.
I want to be a scientist, work in laboratory since I was young. But when it came true during my studying. I feel not comfort and lost my attention to it. But one day, professor asked all class why everybody has to come to studying. Why everybody has to lock ourselves up in the square room call laboratory. Doing correct but don't realize what are we doing. I suddenly understand all the reason of my unenergetic and unhappy. I never prepare myself for studying well enough so, I don't know what to do and what I gain in everday. Now I knew the key to lives that not only set goal but also really want to know! If I want to know, I will happy to learn or do anything. Give my heart in goal and I will get more than I hope.This is my important turning point because I believe turning point came when I realized who I am, what my mistake were in the past, and what I want to do in the future. And this give me all of that!
Thank you!!