IWU-Illinois Wesleyan University Supplement

Prompt:In one paragraph, please describe your specific interest in attending IWU.
no word limit, but should be only one paragraph.

Thanks ahead of time for helping me if you can. :D
When I browsed the Academic Major and Programs page of IWU web-site, I thought God they offer the most choices for students among all those fine Liberal arts colleges, ranging from Accounting to Piano in Music. I am a person with multiple interests. I love Math and Writing and foreign languages and have beening playing the Piano for over 13 years. I've always wanted to become a well-rounded student. In this regard, I can undoubtedly reach my full potential with professors' guidance and personal attention in IWU, a place where versatility is encouraged. Also, the May Term program attracted my attention the first time I read about it. It gives students the chance to explore and exercise, to muse and meditate, to have a taste of what life is really like and to feel things close to us by heart. It can turn immature students into seasoned scholars and helpful citizens. Thus I am eager to get involved in all these kinds of practice which combines academic knowledge, life experience and spiritual inspiration. The third thing I love about IWU is the attention to sports. Doing sports makes me feel lively and fiery and I always find ways to do exercises. When I found that the IWU Titans ranked seventh among all colleges and universities in number of athletes who honored Academic All-America and IWU sports teams hold top ranking positions nationally I knew that IWU is the place where I can feel my burning youth.

You don't have to include God, it sounds awkward. You could say, I was amazed by the number/variety of courses...


I suggest you get rid of that line as its cliche. Everyone wants to be a well-rounded student, right??

the May Term program attracted (grasped) my attention


Start off with finally instead of third. Attention sounds awkward, use dedication.
Doing sports makes everyone feel lively - try something else!

When I found that the IWU Titans ranked seventh among all colleges and universities in the number of athletes who honored Academic All-America and IWU sports teams hold top ranking positions nationally I knew that IWU is the place where I can feel my burning youth.Sounds awkward.

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thanks zahra. i really appreciate it.
and do you think the essay is generally ok?

Yes but just remember to add the corrections! Good Luck!

Please do return the favour by reading my essay:

sure~ :D

and how should i correct the phrase hold top ranking positions nationally
i can't find a correct way to express that.

What do you think?

Please have a look on my essay:

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