The lessons we take from obstacles - UofT One idea application

The lessons we take from obstacles we encounter can be fundamental to shaping our outlook on future challenges. How will you use your previous experiences to reorient your approach to new problems?

While growing up, I've always had a hard time in school; every schoolwork and test that was graded was either okay or not good, especially in math. I had teachers in my report cards saying, "how smart I am, but I need to put more into my school work and tests." I was always confused as a child reading that. How much work do I need to show, and why was it never enough? I was always confused about what it takes to get a perfect mark. After days of studying, asking my teachers questions, and researching things for my assignments, it still wasn't enough; I still couldn't get the perfect grade I wanted to see myself successful. While my peers could get good grades, I was jealous. Why, after everything I do, after all the studying, can I still not do perfectly? Even though I don't need to be the most gifted student, I still wanted to be successful. While becoming a teenager, I found my talent in art, It was the only subject I thought to be successful in.

How can I make this better and what words can I use to make it more interesting.

For a more interesting take that would have the reviewer interested in the background of your character trait, I suggest that you open with an explanation or a story about how you approached a more mature problem. Explain why you approached it that way and work your way back to the start or the reason that you developed this system of approaching problems. Close by indicating that you believe the approach you developed is such that you can apply specific parts, or all of it to new or future problems.

Your current approach is not interesting enough. It is a narrative that every student encounters. It does not stand out as a specific situation. It makes you get lost among the many applicants who are using the same or similar story. You need to find a way to may your learning stand out by using a far more interesting narrative, approach, and presentation.

@Holt
Thank you for your feedback, what are some ways I can make this approach more interesting, can I maybe write about how it affected me personally