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I like physics very much.; Colombia App; why engineering ?



mahmoudjendy 7 / 14  
Dec 29, 2012   #1
For applicants to The Fu Foundation School of Engineering and Applied Science, please tell us from your current and past experiences (either academic or personal) what attracts you specifically to the study of engineering. 1500 character

I like physics very much. i think physics is a part of my personality . I am kinda curious i want to know how and why everything happen.physics fills my curiosity. and I love math too. Math respect my mind .my proficiency in math help me in physics .I love to have a dirty hand. i love fixing things. I love trying to do new things. I love to make electric circuit and l generators. I want a flexible major u a company by which i can work what i want. whether doing research , working in an company or even starting up my own company no difference. I searched for a major has all these condition and found that engineering is accessible to me.The workshop of one of my family members where people fix their motors engine . I wanted to know more about engineering and i think that helped me every much. I stand on the front of huge manual machines. and put the broken part inside it and started to fix it and sometime i make a new part if the old one can not be fixed. Every thing i touched there was made by an physics and calculus rules and I loved the idea to know how and why everything i use in the machine works. I believe " write something that worth reading or do something worth be written " quote. I wanted to do something spark in the human history. something worth be written and engineering give me the access to do so .

what do u think ? regardless of the grammer mistakes... do u think it worth be written?

QWERTY1995 3 / 8  
Dec 29, 2012   #2
Disregarding grammatical errors,
The essay does not flow. Some parts don't make sense and/or are very weak sentences. (ex. .I love to have a dirty hand. ). I suggest you go through sentence by sentence and figure the problems, reading it out loud may help) In terms of content,I think the essay has potential but only if you make it more personal. Don't just say you love to do this and love to build motors, prove it on paper. Good luck.


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