Long division and logarithms are not for me - what in exchange?

Essay Topic #4
Be it inside or outside of the classroom, what have you done to challenge yourself intellectually? Describe an issue, topic or area of study that you have investigated or pursued. (maximum 200 words)

"Changing Tracks"

After the first two weeks of pure math classes during my O levels, it had become clear that long division and logarithms just wasn't for me. I had made a convenient decision to drop the subject and focus on the business ones. Little did I know, A-level mathematics was a detailed extension of what was taught in pure math.

I was terrified knowing all my friends who had taken pure math would be one step ahead of me. In class, our teacher skipped the first few chapters as majority of the students, unlike me, could easily solve the problems themselves. My home tutor would be shocked every time I couldn't do a sum. Every class I had to hear 'should've taken pure math'; I was completely filled with regret.

However, I understood the importance of math and how helpful it would be in the future. As tough as balancing extra classes and hours of studying math with my other subjects had been, I was persistent and motivated. I took to YouTube for help and all-nighters had become a part of my routine. I doubled my effort by staying focused on just studying.

Receiving an A in my mock examination had made all the effort and a lack of social life completely worth it.

Shuprova, the topic you chose to discuss here is a very relevant one. However, correct me if I am wrong, but as a math major, you are once again, discussing math with the reviewer. This shows a highly limited exposure on your part because you cannot discuss anything else not related to math. In all common prompt essays, you are encouraged to show as many sides of your personality, struggles, and successes in as many fields and life experiences as possible. Since most of the papers that I have read from you already pertain to math, try to vary your subject or focus a bit in this essay. Go beyond math and think of something else that you wanted to learn which challenged you or continues to challenge you. That way you show other facets of your personality to the reviewer, which might help to make him more interested to learn more about you as a student.

@holt i actually want to major in business, ive faced a lot of challenges keeping up my math grade. Do you think the essay and the language is too simple for a college essay or is it too boring?

Shuparova, try not to fixate on your being poor in Math by making it the central topic of all your essays. The reviewer needs to get to know you beyond being poor in Math because he has to judge if you make for a qualified candidate based upon this preliminary written interview. That is why I keep asking you to vary your topic content in each essay prompt. Talk to the reviewer as if you were in a real interview. If you focus only on math, you limit your ability to introduce yourself successfully and give the reviewer a well rounded idea as to who you are beyond being a poor math student which, by the way, is a bad thing to keep dredging up if you are trying to get into business school. Poor in Math = Poor in business. That is not the image that you want to plant in the reviewer's head. Don't tank your application before you even have a chance to justify your application in person. If you will make it to the formal interview stage.

Moving on, yes, I hate to say it but yes, your language and topic is too simple for a college essay. The conflict is not as compelling as it can be. If you can find a more serious conflict, one that actually challenged you, aside from Math, then you should discuss that. Try to not always discuss Math in order to avoid reader fatigue because you keep telling the reviewer about the same problem in 100 different ways. He will tire of it and it may affect his ability to properly consider your application.