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Love one another and help others to rise to the higher levels; Peace Corps.



Marz13 2 / 1  
May 27, 2013   #1
Hi everyone! I had great feedback on my first Peace Corps essay, that I would love help with this one as well (feedback and/or grammar corrections are extremely helpful). Thanks again for your help.

Your reasons for wanting to serve as a Peace Corps Volunteer; and
How these reasons are related to your past experience and life goals.
How you expect to satisfy the Peace Corps 10 Core Expectations (rather than addressing all 10 expectations, please be specific about which expectations you anticipate to find most challenging and how you plan to overcome these challenges)

"Love one another and help others to rise to the higher levels, simply by pouring out love. Love is infectious and the greatest healing energy."

-Sai Baba

It's funny how those two sentences can answer the most important question I have ever been asked "why do you want to be in the Peace Corps?" Love may seem like a simple answer but for me coming to understand its true meaning was a long road. Honestly, I have always been in love with the idea of love. However, the more life throws at you the more you reflect on the meaning verses an idea. My fiancĂŠ passed away two years ago, this moment in my life forced me meditate not just on the future but what is truly important. I have come to understand not just love but our connection to each other and the world.

The struggles we go through can unite us if you let it; it gives us awareness to the suffering around us. This can manifest a drive to give the strength we were taught through our own battles to those in their time of weakness. That's what happened to me. Through the darkest point in my life you can call them a family, friends, community or tribe but they bonded together to create a solidarity of strength and love. They were there day and night to cry with me, share their experiences of weakness, to listen and sit quietly when no words could be found. Within time the strength they conveyed started to build the foundation for that strength within me. The love they expressed had more meaning than a fairy tale ending between two people. This love represents selflessness, kindness and compassion. Love is the affectionate actions towards others, one's self and nature. Once I understood this I came to believe that we are not here to figure out why or who we are, that's simple, love. I believe the real questions come down to have we loved enough? Have we looked past the boundaries of family, religion, country and expanded our home globally and our family to being everyone?

After I asked myself those questions, how could I not want to be a part of the Peace Corps? I want you to know that my passion to be a part of the Peace Corps has always been constant throughout my life. I go forward towards situations cautiously and mindfully. My decision to apply now does involved a number of years deliberating over my financial, career and family obligations. Now I am stable and confident that this is the perfect time. I hope to one day have a career working for a nonprofit group that helps the global community through youth development, and I know the Peace Corps is a great place to start. I will not downplay the tough challenges that I will be faced with over the next 27 months. The living conditions may be strenuous, building trust and adapting to new cultures while building confidence in an unfamiliar place will take time and growth. However, out of these challenges can spring the healing of love, hope and unity. I am certain that I have the ability to overcome, adapt and grow with any challenges that come my way.

temptprovidence 8 / 162  
Jun 9, 2013   #2
the more life throws at you the more you reflect on the meaning verses an idea.

put some clarity to the last part of the sentence.

I have come to understand not just love but our connection to each other and the world.

...connections

Love is the affectionate actions towards others, one's self and nature.

action ... you used is that means action will be used as singular.
your expression is excellent and the use of emotional attachment was wonderful... you just showed a little deviation from the topic in the second para but i think there is nothing wrong with it.. that was good.. but some readers really take that seriously... so... otherwise i am highly impressed.

BEST OF LUCK!
dumi 1 / 6793  
Jun 13, 2013   #3
Love may seem like a simple answer but for me coming to understand its true meaning was a long road.

For me, love is a too short and simple answer and understanding what love really does mean is not an easy path for one to explore.

Marz13:the more life throws at you the more you reflect on the meaning verses an idea.
put some clarity to the last part of the sentence.

... yes... you need to improve clarity here.

The struggles we go through can unite us if you let it; it gives us awareness to the suffering around us.

The struggles we encounter give us great insights about life; they make us aware about the sufferings around us and how to overcome them.


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