Military contracting Firm; Common App USC- use your engineering degree to benefit society?

Prompt: How do you plan to use your engineering degree to benefit society? (250 word limit)

I will use my engineering degree to start my own military contracting firm. With a primary concentration on defense. My company would also provide robotics(unmanned aerial vehicles) for municipal law enforcement agencies as well as federal. Practical uses for my drone technology would be to provide surveillance for law enforcement agencies, aid in search & rescue missions, or to help firefighters fight fires, among a multitude of uses for drone technology. As society grows rapidly. I believe we must find alternative and innovative ways to use drone technology and ease human labor through ways mentioned above.

Please provide feedback to improve my essay and am I answering the prompt so far?

This is a great start but I feel that it is undeveloped. You have 250 words, don't leave anything vague! Maybe elaborate on why you think society specifically needs the things you are addressing. Why a concentration on defense? Talk about maybe how you noticed these issues in society and why you want to remedy them. Good luck!

Hey! I think the wording in the middle is a bit weird.


Providing surveillance for law enforcement agencies, aiding search & rescue missions, and helping firefighters, would be among a multitude of practical uses of my drone technology.

Green part: Saying "Drone technology" twice sounds very odd here.

Also, as jackieelynn said, you should elaborate.

Hope this helped! Best of luck, lapd_ray! :)

P.S: My interest is in Drones too :)

This is an incomplete sentence. What do you do with a primary concentration on defense?


I wish you presented this piece of writing more creatively. I think you should have taken the start with the last line and then talked about what you plan to do with your engineering degree in order to contribute your share to find a solution for that.