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I had one criterion/ Vassar Supplement- "why Vassar?"



dreamingoutloud 3 / 5  
Oct 10, 2013   #1
How did you learn about Vassar and what aspects of our college do you find appealing?

When I started my college search, I had one criterion: wherever I go would have to be at least an inconveniently long drive from Los Angeles. After spending hours on end flipping through college guidebooks and doing research online, I made a list of schools to visit.

I spent my spring break on a whirlwind trip of college tours, and by the time I got to Vassar, I was less than excited. It was the morning, I was still jet-lagged, and I was getting tired of the endless stream of information being thrown at me. But things started to look up when I drove by the campus- it was by far the most beautiful one I had seen. I came into the tour feeling a little more hopeful that Vassar could surprise me.

Maybe it was its charming beauty, or the fact that it was one of the few information sessions where I wasn't fighting sleep, but Vassar stood out. Many colleges I looked at boasted a strong liberal arts curriculum, but when I toured Vassar, it was the smaller things that stood out to me. For example, I liked the sense of community that the various dorms seemed to have. As someone who is looking forward to college as an opportunity to meet new people, the idea of a built-in set of social activities piqued my interest. And as a self-proclaimed lifelong Harry Potter nerd, I would be lying if I said that watching Quidditch games didn't sound like a dream come true. But the biggest draw by far is the psychology department. I am especially curious about Professor Greenwood's research about the relationship between people's personality traits and their involvement with the media. Since the media has become such a central component of our society, I think it is both interesting and important to study how people interact with it.

Despite my initial hesitance, Vassar ended up being the highlight of my trip. I left my tour excited instead of exhausted, and by the time I got home I knew that it was the right school for me.

suziwar 2 / 6  
Oct 14, 2013   #2
I think this response is pretty good. You answered how you learned about Vassar and what aspects you like most. The only thing I would say is that you have a catchier intro. because right now it's kind of boring. I like how you mentioned the small aspects that you liked about Vassar and maybe when you say how beautiful Vassar is you can give the details that stood out to you.

Other than that I think it's pretty good! Good luck with all of your writing endeavors!
dumi 1 / 6793  
Oct 15, 2013   #3
wherever I go would have to be at least an inconveniently long drive from Los Angeles.

... why did you have this as the main criterion.... the reader would want to know as it sounds interesting to know :)

Many colleges I looked at boasted a strong liberal arts curriculum, but when I toured Vassar, it was the smaller things that stood out to me.

Many colleges that I was interested, did boast about about strong liberal arts curriculum. However, when I toured in Vassar, I found even some very small things speaking of their strong curriculum.

Good job and Good LUCK! :)


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