Papercraft and its influence on my life; extracurricular activities/ work experiences

Hi everyone, thank you all so much for reviewing my past two essays. Can everyone help me with this essay too?

Prompt: Please briefly elaborate on one of your extracurricular activities or work experiences in the space below (1000 character maximum).

Running the X-Acto knife meticulously down the center of the cutting line and waiting patiently until the glue between two small pieces of paper dried, I came to love this craft. In papercraft each cut and paste has to be perfect, a simple error of deviating 1mm from the cutting line could affect the integrity of work and a small over application of glue may destroy the aesthetics of the craft. However, despite the craft's mind taxing nature, I find it comforting. With every incision and gluing I slowly forget about the stresses of my life: the essay due tomorrow, the pending college application, and the upcoming exams. I, instead, focus on my creation. I pour my heart into every pieces of paper, and every time when the new parts are added I grow excited, because I can see my ideas slowly come to live. Finally, once the last piece of paper completes the craft I would look at it and with a big smile of satisfaction, because my dream had just come true.

Many thanks in advance

linting2012
"...a small over application of glue may destroy the aesthetics of the craft."
you might want to hyphenate, "over-application"

"despite the craft's mind taxing nature, I find it comforting."
why not find a more descriptive word instead of comforting? how about calming or soothing?

"I, instead focus on my creation"
the sentence structure is a bit odd, why not put the I after "instead"

do you mean "slowly come to life" or live?

overall a very nice short answer, nice job!

Hello,

A unique essay. I can't say that I have read something like this one before. Aside from a few grammatical mistakes, this essay is good. The only thing that I would encourage you to do is link the dedication needed to construct an object with paper, to the dedication you will need to accomplish anything in life. We can help. - AAO

What about "must be perfect"?

I would start a new sentence at "A simple error"


Consider adding a "the" as in "integrity of the work"


I realize you've already used quite a bit of vocabulary but if you wanted, you could likely think of a more descriptive word.


There's an opportunity to replace this with "paradoxically" if you so choose.


"With every incision and every dab of glue", possible parallel structure


You could leave out "about" and create a more poetic feeling, fitting better with the smoothness of the rest of the essay


Very nice variation of terms for things that are happening soon


Not sure the comma is necessary but I'm no punctuation queen so I'd check to make sure.


every piece?


"and with every new part added, I grow more excited"


You've used gradually twice in a very short piece. Consider "come into focus"


"I look at it", try to use an active voice


"satisfaction; my dedication has just paid off.

Sorry that my reply is likely longer than your essay. Your response is very poetic and admissions is right, I've never seen anything like it. It stands out for sure.

If you'd like, I have a not-so-beautiful essay that needs beauty-tizing. If you've got the time, I'd really appreciate you looking over it.

Good luck on your admission. With a 1000 word max, you present a beautiful image in far fewer words. I love it!

I like the way you have shown your love for this art. But I'm not sure whether it's a good thing for you to forget things like your papers or essays because of it. :P


My focus is on my creation instead. ... OR... Instead, I focus on my essay.
There's a lot more you can say about this thing. Perhaps a life experience where paper cutting really helped you.

But its still a nicely constructed essay. :)

Wow, thanks guys so many helpful comments while I was asleep, I think I should sleep more if that is what it takes to get more helpful comments.

Nevertheless @Pahan my point was that the momentary relieve from stresses such as the essays due tomorrow helps me relax. But does it really seems like I am forgetting about the essay completely? If so how do you suggest me to change it? BTW thank you for the comment.

Hehehe I was joking. Obviously you wont forget your essay you just want it out of your head for a little while right? hehe don't worry that part is understandable. You have written a good essay. Keep it up. :)

Phew!!! Pahan, I almost got scared for life. Thank you all very much though. I will close this thread now.