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'Passion with a cause' - Common App Essay: personal experience



Jayashree95 4 / 19  
Oct 24, 2012   #1
Evaluate a significant experience, achievement, risk you have taken, or ethical dilemma you have faced and its impact on you.

22nd February 2008
"Jayashree, you're going to get a younger brother or sister" said my mother, closely watching my expression.
Surprise and excitement were my immediate reactions.
Did I have an inkling of how dramatically my life would change? No.

25th September 2012
4 years on, life has irrevocably changed.
Initially it was a mammoth challenge since we all had to alter our lifestyle to accommodate the youngest member of the family. It seemed like waking up after a decade in utopia, for now, life was everything but perfect.

Responsibilities, fragile, unpredictable conditions coupled with a bawling baby was one way of looking at it. Thankfully I envisioned an opportunity: An opportunity to grow; as a person and as a student. It has been one of the best decisions of my life.

What intrigued me was how the once motionless baby learnt to make sense of the world around her. Over the months, gurgling sounds turned to fairly legitimate words, serendipitous movements turned to well coordinated steps and through an unwavering spirit, she was one among us.

I knew then, that any talent can be nurtured, any art can be learnt to if I was willing to go the distance. Whether it's training for a 10k marathon or participating in an international platform like Harvard Model UN or even cooking an Indian meal, it was all possible.

Her birth sparked a desired to delve deeper into the uncharted terrains of neuroscience and this was further ignited by viewing her growth from the standpoint of psychology. To observe her evolve, learn from her mistakes and piece together the jigsaw puzzle called life has been a captivating experience.

The brain with its curiously confounding functioning, is the neuroscientist's muse, an elusive enchanting enigma. Psychology helped to explain how the dynamics of our family changed and enlightened me about the power of the mind.

I believe passion comes with a cause. I have a cause; to cure the maladies of the mind, uncover the reasons behind them and make the world a better place for mankind.

nky99913 1 / 5  
Oct 24, 2012   #2
WOW!! This is a really good essay!!!! I think it could do without so many paragraphs though but other than that its great!!! and I looovvvvveeeee the timeline thing!! Very nice!
Saintlarrys 1 / 3  
Oct 24, 2012   #3
wOW . .iMPRESSIVE WORK THERE . .It a masterpiece. THE TIMELINE IDEA ROCKS!

#please help - @ Calvin College - Calvin College Essay -contributing to the Christian learning environment
@nky99913 NEED YOUR VIEWS TOO PLEASE. :)
himanshusahay 3 / 24  
Oct 24, 2012   #4
Good essay. look for synonyms to some words in a thesaurus for a better style.


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