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Tell us about a passion or strong interest of yours. How [and when] did you become involved in this interest [and for how long have you been involved]? What have you learned about yourself from this interest? How will you apply this knowledge as a student at the University of Waterloo? (900-character limit)
My passion for robotics began as a child at Montreal's Science Museum, where I glimpsed humanity's ambition to terraform Mars. Inspired, I used this vision to audition for my grade 5 FLL team: 'Into Orbit', featuring issues regarding space exploration. From there, I progressed from LEGO to VEX, and eventually designing custom components through CAD software. This commitment led my partner and I to develop a robot that eliminates algae accumulation off industrial vessels, earning us silver at the World Robot Olympiad in Panama. Competitions taught me to work within limitations while designing my robot unlocked new leeway to innovate and iterate without confined boundaries. I hope to bring this mindset to Waterloo's GreenHouse incubator, where knowledge from ECE 486: Robot Dynamics & Control can enhance my ability to prototype robotic systems for environmental impact.
Tell us about a passion or strong interest of yours. How [and when] did you become involved in this interest [and for how long have you been involved]? What have you learned about yourself from this interest? How will you apply this knowledge as a student at the University of Waterloo? (900-character limit)
My passion for robotics began as a child at Montreal's Science Museum, where I glimpsed humanity's ambition to terraform Mars. Inspired, I used this vision to audition for my grade 5 FLL team: 'Into Orbit', featuring issues regarding space exploration. From there, I progressed from LEGO to VEX, and eventually designing custom components through CAD software. This commitment led my partner and I to develop a robot that eliminates algae accumulation off industrial vessels, earning us silver at the World Robot Olympiad in Panama. Competitions taught me to work within limitations while designing my robot unlocked new leeway to innovate and iterate without confined boundaries. I hope to bring this mindset to Waterloo's GreenHouse incubator, where knowledge from ECE 486: Robot Dynamics & Control can enhance my ability to prototype robotic systems for environmental impact.