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dqmonster 3 / 3  
Dec 31, 2012   #1
I believe that everyone is immovable, movable and moves; it is the subject of how and what one portrays themselves as. Even nature has three matters of solid, liquid and gas to form what it is. In my perspective, these three classes are like the building blocks to achieving success. Benjamin Franklin, a powerful and intelligent man, used these blocks to step up to his goal and prove his points. He was determined to find out about electricity from lightning and decided to conduct the experiment using a kite and a Leyden jar to collect the electrical charge. He then received a shock! (Pun intended) He touched the key that was used to insulate the charge and it traveled through his body when contact was made. However, this shock showed that he can transfer these electric impulses through other objects, supporting his hypothesis. You can classify yourself as one of these classes, but why not combine them and use them to amplify its purpose for greater use. I intend to use these same building blocks and put myself into Benjamin Franklin's shoes. I am immovable because I will stand and trust in my beliefs. I will not waver to anyone else's opinions because I would stay true to myself and follow what I believe. In this case, I believed that I want to major in the medical field. I am movable because I learn to face adjustments and adapt to the changes. I wanted to work in the medical field, but now I have to be specific and follow my path. I changed majors many times from wanting to be an anesthetic nurse to a psychologist to now, a pediatrician. I learn to accept what is necessary and become flexible to my choices. I take initiative in my life and after all the immovable and movable classes; I move in order to reach my dream. I started to take AP science classes to broaden my science knowledge, participated in science programs, volunteered in labs and assisted professors. Now, my next move would be to attend the University of Pennsylvania so that I can get closer to reaching onto my goal, instead of only dreaming about it.

PROMPT: Ben Franklin once said, 'All mankind is divided into three classes: those that are immovable, those that are movable, and those that move.' Which are you?

emalw202 3 / 9  
Dec 31, 2012   #2
You're a very talented writer, and I can tell you're a logical kind of guy. However, I fail to see your personality shine through as passionate here. (Which is the key)

Give specific examples in more than one field or activity etc. where you are moveable, immovable or move. Show all facets of yourself.

I'd also appreciate it if you read my Columbia Supplement. Thanks!


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