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UC2: The piano, a song in many different ways



Haru21 6 / 8  
Nov 29, 2009   #1
Ok, I think I'm going to with this one after much deliberation. the 2nd attempt of my 6 tries at the UC prompt 2: describe a talent and how it relates to who you are.

Einstein once said "Try not to be a man of success, but a man of value". That is why my greatest accomplishment has nothing to do with winning a regional debate tournament or being recognized as an advanced member of the model united nations, but having the ability to play the piano. I value the enjoyment I get from playing songs over my academic achievements because it allows me to express who I am. The piano taught me how to live.

One can learn how to play the piano in different ways. A person may watch others and mimic their movements to produce a melody, like how a child may live in accordance to their parents. Or one could sit and tinker with the keys until the right pitches are produced, creating a personal style without guidance or knowledge. The majority, however, uses the traditional method by learning the theories and applying them on the keys with time and practice.

My method integrates all three methods. It reflects on who I am as a person, because I choose to find my own way in life. I would learn from my mistakes, but would not repeat the ones others made before me. I am proud of this strength and individuality, because this was not always the case. At first, my playing was soft and timid as I took judgments to the heart. Now, I am not afraid to raise volume and display my emotions for all to hear.

When I press upon the weighted keys, it's more than playing a score of notes. I release my feelings without restraint or worries; this is the only place where I'm always true to myself. I could play the same song countless of times and show different emotions with each round. If I'm happy, for example, one can tell despite the song being as melancholy as Beethoven's "Moonlight Sonata" or as sorrowful as Evanescence's "Hello". I believe that the pieces I play to express my soul will give comfort or inspiration to those who hear it. Sharing them in concerts is one of my greatest joys.

yang 2 / 278  
Nov 29, 2009   #2
Like life seems an awkward phrasing.

"But each song requires..."

Instead of reversely, "Or" is more concise.

"trying to figure out their own way", antecedent of their is one, so his/her own way.

"may go about it", make it more formal. about playing piano?

Instead of talking about being a pianist, maybe you could change your thesis to ways of playing a song? Because it seems to me that your essay doesn't focus on the process of you playing the piano, but rather how a song reflects on your life.

If I got it right, then you could make your intro much more poetic, reflecting on how songs are ways of living.

Hope that helps.


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