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I'm most proud of my sensitivity - MIT essay - attribute of personality



dorbaruch 3 / 6  
Dec 18, 2013   #1
Thanks for your help!

What attribute of your personality are you most proud of, and how has it impacted your life so far? This could be your creativity, effective leadership, sense of humor, integrity, or anything else you'd like to tell us about. (*) (200-250 words)

I cry in movies.
I guess it doesn't seem like much of a confession to make, but if you saw me in person, you would probably be more surprised. I'm a big guy. 6.2 feet tall, 220 pounds in weight, buzz cut, and my frequent visits to the gym have given me a width that is pretty much comparable to mike tyson's. My natural expressions are very serious, and an innocent bystander might think that my thoughts wander towards a cruel scheme that involves smashing all that comes to hand. And yet, sit beside me at a sad movie and your first impression of me will change from that extreme to the other.

I cry in movies because I experience them to the fullest. When I see a movie I identify with the heroes in a complete and utter way as I guide them through every step of their journey. But my sensitivity and ability to put myself in the shoes of others is not limited to fictional characters in movies and directly impacts my everyday life. My tendency to identify with the feelings of others always allowed me to offer honest and nonjudgmental assistance, support and advice. Many of my acquaintances know that they can turn to me with any problem and share with me their deepest and most intimate issues knowing that I will always be a listening ear and provide an immediate support.

My sensitivity makes me a better person and a better friend.

admission2012 - / 475  
Dec 18, 2013   #2
Haha - Absolutely perfect. First you made me laugh at the beginning of your essay - which is always a good thing - and then you followed up with a compelling argument. Well done! -Admissions Advice Online
roxy481 5 / 11  
Dec 18, 2013   #3
this is a great essay.
you answered the prompt and let the admissions committee know more about you as a person, both internally and externally
OP dorbaruch 3 / 6  
Dec 19, 2013   #4
Thank you for your comments!
And what about the grammar? I'm an international student so I don't feel very confident about my english..
chandescartes 2 / 4  
Dec 19, 2013   #5
Great Essay! It really answers the prompt well.
One thing that bothers me a bit is the last sentence... Better person? maybe its just me, but I think you could come up with something better.


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