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"ready to face life with determination" - a person who has influenced you



leon_joel 4 / 2  
Sep 3, 2011   #1
Tell us about a person who has influenced you in a significant way.

Almost every day of anyone's life is experience. There is always a time in life, when someone comes along; someone with an extraordinary story to inspire you and help you to learn what sheer persistence and determination is all about no matter the obstacle. My story begins of a My story begins of a young man; Paul Anomakodie. This extra ordinary man is the fifth born to a humble family of six children. He was able to see but after suffering from measles at the age of four, his vision slowly started disappearing. Attempts to help him regain his sight were ineffective. Life since that time has not been easy but due to sheer persistence, determination and the backing of his wonderful family and friends, Paul has grown up and matured just as any able bodied person would. Getting water from the well to wash his clothes and doing general chores around the house were also part of his everyday life. . Paul's passion for journalism started at the cape coast University of Ghana where he worked at the Campus Student Radio Station. After graduating, Paul moved to happy fm a local radio station in the nation's capital. However, after his post program was suspended he decided it was time to conquer the world. Today he is the presenter of e-highlight a program on ETV Ghana that summarizes the day's news items at 11 am and again at 4:30pm. Most TV viewers have described it as groundbreaking and some even called it the "Night Wonder". Nevertheless, whichever way you want to see it Paul is the master of what he does. Paul wants to use his story as an inspiration to for all other persons who have the passion for what they want to do in life. His determination has shown as that if a young blind man was able to defy all odds to get to the top of broadcasting career then living with a disability is not an obstacle in life. Today Paul is a source of hope to many Ghanaian youth out there, which I am not counting out. Call it a Vision in Progress or Story of Hope but whichever way you look at it this is the story of Paul Anomakodie.

Paul's story taught me that it does not really matter the problem you are facing or the troubles you are going through you will be able to do it and you have to be bold. His story taught me that the life is like a hurdle race. The small and big challenges or hurdles that we jump over are the steps to be closer to the finish line. Of course, we might fall down or, worse, injure ourselves but we can still fight on. It made me understand every person whether physically challenged or not has challenges one-way or the other, we should just believe in God and the plans He has for us. It has taught me to believe in myself and do everything to the best of my abilities. None is lost and there is hope for everyone who is ever ready to face life with determination.

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Please help me edit this and correct any mistakes. Help me to make this essay better.

Powerfuldog 5 / 9  
Sep 3, 2011   #2
A good ,emotive essay but it seems a little too preachy at times. You could revise phrases such as "Call it a Vision in Progress", etc.

This is a solid essay. Keep up the great work.
OP leon_joel 4 / 2  
Sep 4, 2011   #3
thanks for the little piece of advice. I am so grateful. thank you.
Ashley12375 - / 2  
Sep 4, 2011   #4
this is a great essay. i dont think it sounds too preachy its what you are passionate about. its wonderful. could you help with mine? Thanks!
Denice 2 / 14  
Sep 4, 2011   #5
It's really nice. It's so impressive and so inspiring, not that preachy. I think you're like Paul in a way that you are determined to face all the challenges in your life. Determination is the key to success, anyway. So keep it up. Write more essays so you can inspire more with what you have learned from others. It's nice to meet you. God bless.


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