Hello! I want to make sure I'm writing my response in a clear manner.
Prompt: In no more than 250 words, please tell us why BU is a good fit for you, and what specifically led you to apply for admission?
I refuse to sacrifice my interests and goals to attend a school that can't cater to both, and thankfully, I won't have to do so at Boston University. I want to study the Korean language as I obtain a Bachelor's degree in computer engineering - a feat that is nearly impossible at other colleges I'm applying to- and when I saw that I could major in engineering and minor Korean, I immediately started the application. As I pursue my studies, I plan to join a variety of clubs pertaining to my interests - including photography, writing, and dancing - and I'm determined to study abroad all over the world by the end of my college career. I want a school that will improve me academically, culturally, and socially; and because Boston University is capable of doing so, I know it's a good fit for me.
I feel it's too short, and doesn't have enough specifications when I mention improving academically, culturally, etc., but I don't how to provide specific things. Any suggestions/opinions?
I would advice you to separate the portion below:
I want to study the Korean language as I obtain a Bachelor's degree in computer engineering - a feat that is nearly impossible at other colleges I'm applying to- and when I saw that I could major in engineering and minor Korean, I immediately started the application.
Using the dashes mean that the sentence would also flow without the information in between then. Right know,the whole statement contains very awkward wording.
Maybe this would work
I want to study the Korean L anguage as I obtain a Bachelor's degree in C omputer E ngineering: a feat that is nearly impossible at other colleges I'm applying to.
Or just delete the information between the dashes all together.
@jjj90 Okay, thank you! I agree with your revision. it flows better!
Kennysha, you have actually answered the prompt quite well. I will caution you against mentioning that you plan to study all over the world by the time you finish college though. Universities are looking for students who will stay the course with them. Not jump around like a tumbleweed, gathering no moss. The university wants to make an impact upon you and your life. Let's try to avoid any reference to not staying till graduation ok? I really think it will help :-)
With 145 words, you have plenty of room to develop this statement. Why not discuss your major and minor choices in greater detail? Detailing how the academic style and teaching at BU fits into your idea of the perfect education because of your chosen fields of study. Explain how the combination of the two make sense to you when it probably won't to the other people who read it. After all, you have chosen two distinctly unique subjects to study and right now, I don't see any relation between them. If you can connect them in some way, then the essay stands a good chance of being noticed and remembered by the admissions officer :-)
@vangiespen thank you! I really appreciate it!!
