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Stanford Essay: About me. Acting.



schmevie 6 / 13  
Dec 15, 2009   #1
Another one.
I Really need help with this one.

Virtually all of Stanford's undergraduates live on c
ampus. What would you want your future roommate to know about you? Tell us something about you that will help your future roommate -- and us -- know you better.

In order to be a good actor, you must make pretending be as real possible. It is a gift really to be able to no longer pretend but be so engaged in a role you simply become real. My life is a long play, where I spend a majority of my time playing two roles. A lead and a minor.

During my lead role I bear the responsibility of carrying the show, and making sure the show operates. During this role I am immersed. My main focus is to make myself as appealing as possible. I will say things in order to please the audience, things that can damage the integrity of the show and the integrity of the other actors. But nevertheless this is the play where when my name is unknown the cast list will be glanced over countless times... The play where all eyes are on me, and every applause is distributed to each actor by my portion is bigger. At the end flowers adorn the stage and I collect them and add them to the vases already bestrewn of flowers. Flashes blind me as the curtain opens and I take my bow. The length of the play is short but it is lived.

When my first role has ended and the stage floors have been swept. The real me is nowhere to be found. This process is grueling, but it helps me find myself. I dig through every piece of me in order to find me. I have lost my dictation, my intonation. I have lost my mannerisms, my character, and the fundamentals of my life. I'll find them and ill know who I was. I will remember but will have to leave them off to the side considering I have another show soon.

My second role requires much less. It is a minor role. A role where I spend more time studying lines I already know. I'm complacent and satisfied with myself because this role is easy. I'm jealous, but cannot blame myself. I blame the director. I'm much more vulnerable. I'm reserved and looked down upon. I am envious of all other roles and sometimes wish I had the roles of others. My brief dialogue serves as a device used to break silences. I'm shy but im comfortable. An opportunity for improvisation arrives but I don't take it. I'm forgotten instantly. I pay little attention considering little attention is paid to me. When my role is over I simply take off my costume. It's easy really because not much work is required.

Reflecting on both my roles would be unfair to describe me, because I wouldn't say I'm arrogant nor would I say I'm complacent or shy. Although my life is a play im the actor that's willing to take on any role. I'm willing to put myself into positions where im vulnerable. My life is filled with different opportunities for me to act. In other words acting can be seen as connecting. I act so that I can connect with people I would never imagine of interacting with. Acting for me is an environment where I can take different roles and learn more about myself. I will spend countless hours preparing my roles. I will not rest until my roles are perfected learning more about myself through what im not than what I am. I'm not the lead nor am I the minor. I'm a hungry actor with passion to play any role so that I can learn more about myself than the characters I play.

I encourage you to take part in my play. This play requires no auditions, no talent. Just bring yourself.

Logical_Fella_C - / 31  
Dec 15, 2009   #2
Oh my... I hope you do realize that this essays is WAY over the limit (1800 characteristics).
This is 3200+ characteristics long, so... it needs to be cut short.
Plus, I gotta tell you, I didn't really get all the analogy of acting in this essay.
Since you mention this,

Reflecting on both my roles would be unfair to describe me, because I wouldn't say I'm arrogant nor would I say I'm complacent or shy

I'm not sure what to make of from the first two paragraphs... What were they for? If they don't really portray who you are?

I suggest you be more straight-forward and kinda informal, especially with this kind of essay.
But it's really up to you I guess.
EF_Kevin 8 / 13052  
Dec 16, 2009   #3
In order to be a good actor, you must be able to pretend in a way that is as r eal possible.

and making sure the show operates.

Above, what does it mean to operate? Don't say any meaningless things in this important essay!

The play where all eyes are on me, and every applause is distributed to each actor by my portion is bigg er.

Sounds superficial, thirsting for attention. This is sort of a statement of the obvious, too, because the lead role always gets more attention.

Reflecting on both my roles would be unfair to describe me, because I wouldn't say I'm arrogant nor would I say I'm complacent or shy.----> it's good that you start talking about what they say about you, bcause that is what the essay is really supposed to be about. I suggest looking at the topic sentence ofr each paragraph and seeing if you can rewrite each topic sentence so that it is a sentence about what your roommate should know about you.

:-)
Alex728 2 / 5  
Dec 22, 2009   #4
I like how it is full of imagery, but I really don't get the sense of who you are at all behind it. The images don't really describe a person as far as I can tell, maybe you should try finding images that describe you more clearly? Or at least find a way to relate your connection with these essays better. Overall, I see where you were going with this, I just think that it needs some work.


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