I really need help polishing this essay. So any input will be helpful!
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It is not necessary to research, read, or refer to the texts from which these quotations are taken; we are looking for original, personal responses to these short excerpts. Remember that your essay should be personal in nature and not simply an argumentative essay. (250-500 words)
"Stereotyped beliefs have the power to become self-fulfilling prophesies for behavior."
Elizabeth Aries, Professor of Psychology, Amherst College
Stereotyped beliefs do have the power to become self-fulfilling prophesies for behavior if the person who is being stereotyped allows it to happen. My focus is not on the stereotype of men and women, but the stereotype of certain race. I personally have not allowed a stereotyped belief to have self-fulfilling prophecy for my behavior. Being a Muslim woman born and raised in United Arab Emirates, people have the impression that I come from an oppressive, strict, and close-minded background. There impression of me has not prophesied my behavior. I am quite the opposite of the typical impression people aim to those who are Muslim and Arabic. I am willing to learn new concepts, accepting of all people, and have a mind of my own.
Below, I will cross out some sentences that are unnecessary:
My focus is not on the stereotype of men and women, but the stereotype of certain race. I personally have not allowed a stereotyped belief to have self-fulfilling prophecy for my behavior. Being a Muslim woman born and raised in United Arab Emirates, I notice that people think I come from an oppressive, strict, and close-minded background.
Okay, it seems you strayed from the question. I hop you will re-write this in a way that shows that YOU UNDERSTAND how a steryotypical belief can become a self-fulfilling prophecy. For example, cops use racial profiling sometimes, because they believe that minorities are more likely to traffic drugs, and the result is that they search more people of color for drugs This causes them to find drugs possessed by people of color more often.
Another example is the way that people might think minotiries are less trustworthy, so they turn down their applications for jobs, and then these dejected members of minority cultures sometimes turn to crime as a result.
You need to show that you understand, for example, how American prejudices toward people of your ethnic background can cause them to act hostile toward you, and in turn people of your culture will feel hostile toward them. Thus, a self-fulfilling prophecy can be observed.
Good luck re-writing this. Be sure to explain in a way that shows your understanding of this concept!
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Thank you for your reply! I will put all of your critiques into consideration. Anyone else want to give it a shot? Please and thank you.
amherst quote-tried re-writing still unclear, help please
I tried re-writing but i still need a lot of help and i feel the flow is awful. Please help me make this better. Thank you
It is not necessary to research, read, or refer to the texts from which these quotations are taken; we are looking for original, personal responses to these short excerpts. Remember that your essay should be personal in nature and not simply an argumentative essay. (250-500)
"Stereotyped beliefs have the power to become self-fulfilling prophesies for behavior."
Elizabeth Aries, Professor of Psychology, Amherst College
Arabs are too lazy to fix the problems that pollute their countries. How many terrorists have you seen when you lived in the Middle East? Wait, I thought women in all parts of the Middle East were not allowed to walk outside with out wearing the traditional head scarf. These are the typical stereotyped questions and statements I receive from people.
Stereotyped beliefs do have the power to become self-fulfilling prophesies for behavior only when the person being stereotyped allows it to happen. I personally have not allowed a stereotyped belief to have self-fulfilling prophecy on my behavior. Being a Muslim woman born and raised in United Arab Emirates, people have the impression that I come from an oppressive, strict, and closed minded background. Their impression of me has not prophesied my behavior. I am rather the opposite of the typical impression people have of those who are Muslim and Arabic. I am willing to learn new concepts, accepting of all people, and have a mind of my own.
Far-fetched questions and stereotyped statements are directed toward me on a regular basis. These statements have increased due to the devastation of 9/11. The gruesome actions of a few extremists have shaped how most people perceive the Muslim culture. People have categorized me as a terrorist. Unkind stereotypes did discourage me from better informing people around me. If discontinued informing people of the true Arab ways I would have fallen into the stereotype that Arabs are too lazy to fix their problems. I have been, to the best of my capability, tried informing people of the culture and ways of the Middle East in hope of changing their stereotyped beliefs. People who are true Muslims do not kill simply because they believe the other race is inferior to them. Instead, the Muslim faith focuses on brotherly love, acceptance, and the tolerance of others.
By informing individuals about the nature of the Muslim culture, I hope to disable the power of those who negatively stereotype.