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surprised by how much you learned - UOFT ONE IDEA ESSAY ARCHITCTURE



Jszyuan 1 / -  
Nov 24, 2024   #1
Heres the questions "One Idea Essay:
"Describe a time you were surprised by how much you learned in the process of researching new ideas or learning new skills. What was it about the process that was rewarding and how can you apply what you've learned to your future endeavours?" (250-650 words)

Growing up, I dreamed about diving into coral reefs like the ones I saw in movies like Ponyo. The idea of exploring the ocean and its mysteries felt magical and so I started my research about the ocean living environment, which became a passion of mine. Learning about the importance of reefs and all the species of sea life that live there only cultivated my interest. However, as I grew older, I became more aware of the impacts of climate change, including how rising water temperatures cause reefs to lose the algae they depend on to photosynthesize. The revelation that over half of the world's reefs have been lost since the 1950s shocked me. Realizing the scale of the problem, I began researching more and more about how general consumer daily choices and industries affect our environment and planet. What surprised me most was an article that spoke about how buildings were responsible for 35% of global CO2 emissions.

Though I had never thought of the environmental impact of architecture, it became clear how important it was for sustainability. Buildings, unlike coral reefs, are man-made systems that we control. Therefore, if they are part of the problem, then they can also be a part of the solution. This inspired me to explore more sustainable designs that aligned with nature. This research taught me how intertwined the ocean, land, and even the spaces we create are. It also showed me how I could use design to connect these systems, creating sustainable solutions rather than feeding into the problem. This process of understanding was rewarding not only because I had learned new things, but also because I realized I could use them in a meaningful way.

I realized that reimagining the way we design and create spaces using nature as a blueprint was key to creating a sustainable future. Just like how coral reefs can be self-sufficient by using symbiotic relations with species like algae to recycle energy and resources efficiently. I believe that buildings can also use a closed-loop system for energy and water so that they can support life rather than deplete it. This research has shown me how design and architecture can be used as a solution to pollution rather than a crutch. I aspire to use my passion for the environment to support a new age in architecture that respects nature and is sustainable.

Holt  Educational Consultant - / 15466  
Nov 25, 2024   #2
The first paragraph needs to be heavily tweaked. Since you are referencing how you developed a love for ocean research, you should avoid referencing "growing up". Instead, you should avoid referencing an age group or age range. Be generic. Do not be specific about the when because it makes the when and how hard to believe. A child does not have the capacity to research this sort of field or topic.

This inspired me to explore

What fields did you explore? How did the activities lead to more inspiration on your part? The paper is a bit too general in representation for the most part. What you have to do is add more specifics. Remember, you have 600 words to use and this is your written interview. So specifics are important if the reviewer is to get a better idea of how you gained the knowledge that has prepared you for this course


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