Hey, I was just wondering if someone could revise this short essay I wrote for my application to USF. It was an open topic btw.
To a civilian American, the term military brat can seem like a negative connotation; however, for me the term shows my worldliness and diversity. The lifestyles and cultures associated with being a military brat have most certainly influenced who I am as a person. Growing up as a military brat I have never truly had a place to call "home". It is custom for military brats to move every three to four years. In fact, after living five years in Tampa, Florida I was itching for something new. When I found out I was moving to Germany my sophomore year I was beyond ecstatic. On the other hand, my friends were quite the contrary. I remember one of my friend's, who was apprehensive, stating verbatim, "I don't think I could be a military brat. I have lived in the same town my entire life and I would hate to move."
Moreover, the constant friendship loss associated with being a military brat has forced me to become more amiable and outgoing. The continued presence of an authoritative military figure has molded me into a more respectful and courteous individual. In addition, I have become cunningly adaptable to new environments and have been immersed in many different cultures around the world. I have had the opportunity to attend elementary school in Japan, middle school in the United States, and high school in Germany. I adapt quickly with little to no effort and I am ready for my next "home". Above all, I am dedicated, motivated, and open for a new experience. The characteristics I have acquired in my twelve years of being a military brat have provided me the necessary qualities to excel and become a valuable asset to the USF community.
Thanks, Donte
To a civilian American, the term military brat can seem like a negative connotation; however, for me the term shows my worldliness and diversity. The lifestyles and cultures associated with being a military brat have most certainly influenced who I am as a person. Growing up as a military brat I have never truly had a place to call "home". It is custom for military brats to move every three to four years. In fact, after living five years in Tampa, Florida I was itching for something new. When I found out I was moving to Germany my sophomore year I was beyond ecstatic. On the other hand, my friends were quite the contrary. I remember one of my friend's, who was apprehensive, stating verbatim, "I don't think I could be a military brat. I have lived in the same town my entire life and I would hate to move."
Moreover, the constant friendship loss associated with being a military brat has forced me to become more amiable and outgoing. The continued presence of an authoritative military figure has molded me into a more respectful and courteous individual. In addition, I have become cunningly adaptable to new environments and have been immersed in many different cultures around the world. I have had the opportunity to attend elementary school in Japan, middle school in the United States, and high school in Germany. I adapt quickly with little to no effort and I am ready for my next "home". Above all, I am dedicated, motivated, and open for a new experience. The characteristics I have acquired in my twelve years of being a military brat have provided me the necessary qualities to excel and become a valuable asset to the USF community.
Thanks, Donte