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Slumar206 2 / 5  
Jul 8, 2017   #1

moments of life



Every Saturday, I turn on the playlist on my phone, roll up my sleeve, lace up my sneakers, pull up my socks and start my morning with a walk. I stare as pieces of my breath leave my chest to form puffs of air. I feel the cold morning breeze brush over my skin and start to warm up as the sun announces its arrival with rays of its golden goodness, like a canvas spread of yellow paint. I watch as the trees form a black silhoutte against the sky with branches spreading out like arms, to absorb the first rays of sunlight accompanied with the chirping birds that pierce through the cold morning air watch as beads of the morning dew pass through my sneakers, into my socks and sink into my soul, body and mind.

This is my cup of tea for the day.

My body and mind awaken and stretch themselves open like the branches of the trees, trying to absorb everything. Only the echoes of a dog barking and the revving of a car engine remind me that, thankfully, this is nature walk is my reality; a place in this world that I can recognize myself with, not some fantasy.

It is my belief that we, as humans live life like it's a race, in which we have to go as fast as possible and get as much done as possible. One is constantly on the go: wake up in the morning, go to work or school, come home and do what we must do, tuck ourselves in at night and get ready for another day. But many do not take moments to stop and enjoy the smaller things in life and reflect.

To me these moments of reflection, these moments of pausing, are most important. The moments I take to bake, the moments I take a morning walk to breathe in fresh air and have the cool wind brush my skin with the melody of the chirping birds. The moments I take to repose after a hectic day. These are all moments that I need to survive, so I know I'm not a robot with no stop button.

Please how do I end this essay. It is for UChicago and Harvard and if it is not up to their standards please just tell me to stop writing this essay.

Go hard on this essay, please

Holt  Educational Consultant - / 15384  
Jul 8, 2017   #2
Mari, unfortunately, this essay will not work. It just a rehash of your baking essay. In fact, you redirected the essay towards the end to discuss baking again. In order to properly write this open topic essay, you need to find a more interesting topic to discuss. Reviewers often look for certain quirks or interesting qualities or hobbies that you have which will help the reviewer learn something unique about you. Something that the common app prompts did not allow you to present. It will be best if you get over the fixation with baking and try to discover something more interesting about you to present to the reviewer. Also, in order to avoid any complications in your application regarding double submissions of the same essay, try your best to present two different essays to the different universities. This will be to your benefit because you can present a better essay to your first choice university. At this point, I would not advice you to continue using this essay. Like I said, come up with a more interesting personal presentation for yourself. This is your opportunity to call the attention of the reviewer to something about you that might make your application stand out. Don't waste it by presenting boring and repeated discussions from the common app prompts. Post your new essay in a new thread so that I can advice you there regarding your new essay. We have a one essay per thread policy here so don't post your new essay within this thread as it will be deleted by the admin when they discover it. Start a new thread with a separate essay. One new essay per university. Don't slack off and submit the say essay to all the universities you are applying to. Even your essays need to provide unique information based upon the personal reasons you have for applying at a university. Your topics are limitless, so do your best to leverage this opportunity in your application essays.


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