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Prompt: In the Bingo palace, author Louise Edrich, Class of 1976, writes "... no one gets wise enough to really understand the heart of another, though it is the task of our life to try". Discuss.
"I did not say..." she says
"No don't tell me that" he interrupts
This is a common scenario of my parents bickering. Sitting in the living room-or anywhere in the house actually- with my palm against my cheek, I watch my parents have their little argument while I try not to take a side when put in-between.
Time after time I wondered why it just won't stop, and then one day I realized "none of them wanted to listen. None of them wanted to understand". There wouldn't be any need for an argument in the first place if only one of them had tried to understand the other. Soon afterwards I began noticing this wasn't just an issue with my parents, it was everywhere- elders in the community, teachers not listening to students when done something wrong, friends when having differences.
I decided to carry out an experiment: at different times, I spoke to my parents separately about the lack of communication and understanding in their relationship. After that, the rate of argument reduced and misunderstandings were resolved quicker. Although there are still times in which the initial problem is more consistent, it shows that a little bit of understanding can go a long way. Personally, I have taken this lesson from my parents and apply it to the rest of the world around me.
Also, I believe that to understand, one has to listen first. Therefore, If to even a small degree people can try to listen and then understand the heart of another then there would be a great positive change. (263 words)
the lack of communication and understanding
Prompt: In the Bingo palace, author Louise Edrich, Class of 1976, writes "... no one gets wise enough to really understand the heart of another, though it is the task of our life to try". Discuss.
"I did not say..." she says
"No don't tell me that" he interrupts
This is a common scenario of my parents bickering. Sitting in the living room-or anywhere in the house actually- with my palm against my cheek, I watch my parents have their little argument while I try not to take a side when put in-between.
Time after time I wondered why it just won't stop, and then one day I realized "none of them wanted to listen. None of them wanted to understand". There wouldn't be any need for an argument in the first place if only one of them had tried to understand the other. Soon afterwards I began noticing this wasn't just an issue with my parents, it was everywhere- elders in the community, teachers not listening to students when done something wrong, friends when having differences.
I decided to carry out an experiment: at different times, I spoke to my parents separately about the lack of communication and understanding in their relationship. After that, the rate of argument reduced and misunderstandings were resolved quicker. Although there are still times in which the initial problem is more consistent, it shows that a little bit of understanding can go a long way. Personally, I have taken this lesson from my parents and apply it to the rest of the world around me.
Also, I believe that to understand, one has to listen first. Therefore, If to even a small degree people can try to listen and then understand the heart of another then there would be a great positive change. (263 words)