"Why Vassar" - Vassar College Supplement Essay

"How did you learn about Vassar and what aspects of our college do you find appealing?"

500 character limit
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I was born and raised in suburban East Rochester, NY. It seemed I would still be there for college, so my family mentioned some institutions, Vassar College among them. Unexpectedly, my family moved to Las Vegas. Although I love Nevada, its history, culture, and environment are nowhere near as superb as those in New York State. I'm impressed with the atmosphere created by the minds at Vassar. I hope to be a valuable addition with my interests in the International Studies and Japanese programs.

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Did I assess every part of the prompt?
Are there any awkward sentences that could be rewritten without exceeding the character limit?

I've been seeing other Vassar essays and they are MUCH longer. Am I missing something?
I want to add WAY more; I've been cutting this down all day.
I didn't get the space to mention my interest in the soccer club, fencing, Victorian Studies, drama and art department, the summer program to Japan that I would do, and the parts of campus that attract me the most.

Please be vicious with your criticism, I need it! <3

basically the problem is that you should just write a long essay and then upload it.

Where are you doing this supplement? There is no character limit. They ask you to upload a document if you are applying online. You are meant to write an essay, not a short personal statement. I would suggest 500-600 words (not characters) max for the essay.

Commonapp.org!! D: Omg you sure? I'm glad I asked thenn...

Well its not a bad thing, I was struggling to keep it short... its just that now I have to go back and im running out of time. XD

Ok then, does that mean that the same goes for all essays that have character limits but allow an uploaded version?!

Not necessarily. If a college has a character limit on their online supplement version, then if you choose to upload a document, you should TRY and stick to that limit or be somewhere AROUND the limit. It can be 100-150 or even 200 more characters, possibly. I doubt colleges will count the characters if you upload a document. That is one of the advantages of applying to colleges on paper. In the case of Vassar, which has NO character limit on their online version, you can do what you feel is necessary. Now, that isn't to say that you should write a 1000 word "Why Vassar" essay. Try and be short and concise. Maybe 500-700 words MAX. And don't worry, I'm currently writing my "Why Vassar" essay as we speak! Need to get it sent to the post office EARLY tomorrow morning, haha. Good luck!

hey in addition to the fact that u need to increase the number of words
try being a little more creative
see if u want to talk about how moving to las vegas had an effect on choosing vassar then describe it briefly because your prompt is very disconnected

i would suggest you to go through the college's website and then add more substance to your prompt

goodluck
write back and i might help if u need any that

Great job! I hope you get accepted.
Unexpectedly, my family moved to Las Vegas. ---this sentence is a little strange because moving is something so deliberate, it must be a little expected!

Although I love Nevada, its history, culture, and environment are nowhere near as superb as those in New York State.---superb is general, and you have a chance here to say something crystal clear about the difference in culture, history, and envir. thanks for helping a lot of people lately!

essay should be long preferable in the 500 word count range