I also wrote another essay for UCF. To save space, I'll just add it here.
Why did you choose to apply to UCF?
During high school, I looked through many colleges to see which college was best for me. From visiting my two brothers at UCF I determined that UCF is the perfect school for me.
Both of my brothers have become successful after leaving UCF. They both have stable and reliable jobs, which is mainly because of attending UCF. One of my brothers, worked on campus for UCF. While working, a famous company in New York became interested in him. Now he still works for the same company after many years. I want to be like this. Like my brother I would be more than willing to work on campus for UCF. With the large amount of jobs and surrounding businesses, finding a job would be more than easy.
Both of my brothers said that the campus was superb and that they would never change to any other schools. After visiting them, I noticed many of the students showing school pride by wearing gold and black shirts and from participating in the UCF blackout football games.
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Why did you choose to apply to UCF?
During high school, I looked through many colleges to see which college was best for me. From visiting my two brothers at UCF I determined that UCF is the perfect school for me.
Both of my brothers have become successful after leaving UCF. They both have stable and reliable jobs, which is mainly because of attending UCF. One of my brothers, worked on campus for UCF. While working, a famous company in New York became interested in him. Now he still works for the same company after many years. I want to be like this. Like my brother I would be more than willing to work on campus for UCF. With the large amount of jobs and surrounding businesses, finding a job would be more than easy.
Both of my brothers said that the campus was superb and that they would never change to any other schools. After visiting them, I noticed many of the students showing school pride by wearing gold and black shirts and from participating in the UCF blackout football games.
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