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"addicted to something addictive" - It is just a Daily Journal


eastspringkim 3 / 7  
Sep 16, 2010   #1
I am not sure if I am right to post my journal writing on this page.
Could anyone please let me know if I am wrong to post here?

Ever since I came to the USA I have been exercising every morning, and there are only few days when I do not go out for running. Regular jogging every morning helped me become healthy, and I am hopefully becoming strong even now. I am such an unusual gourmand, who eats far more than ordinary person and maintains 67kg for three years, that everybody gets shocked at the amount I eat. I eat a lot, yet nevertheless I am good-lookingly skinny and slim. Needless to say, running or excercising on the regular basis lift up not only our physical strength, but also self-confidence; I do not know if it is applicable to others, but definitely and undoubtedly it is to me.

There is no doubt that once one is addicted to something addictive, it seems impossible for them to phase out the addiction. In my perspective, it is due to their thinking that they enjoy, play and have fun with, rather than be addicted. A famous male comedian has recently ruined his life by himself in Sebu. According to his acquaintance he had lost a couple of hundred thousand dollars one night, and even badly he has a huge debt to a few usurers. It is not his very first history; he has a few histories in terms of violating the relevance law. It seems indeed impossible for him to return where he used to work: viewers and his fans are sick and tired of his constant lies and ridiculous behavior. It is therefore absolutely imperative that we should not get addicted to something addictive and eliminate and get rid of the bad habits, if any.
mea505 - / 265  
Sep 16, 2010   #2
Dong Chun Kim,

If you have been given an assignment to write a journal, this is a good place to start, indeed. You are off to a good start with respect to what you have written thus far. I have often found that one does not correct one's grammar or spelling when it comes to a journal -- unless you want us to.

Mark
OP eastspringkim 3 / 7  
Sep 16, 2010   #3
mea505
I actually want to, but not for the small errors.
If there is a fatal grammartical error, please correct it for me.
And you said I was off to a good start, could you let me know
what the good start would be because I have never learnt about
the form for journal writing, so I would be happy if you help me out!!
Thank you in advance^^
EF_Kevin 8 / 13,321 129  
Sep 19, 2010   #4
not sure if I am right to post my journal writing on this page.

You certainly are right. Your journaling is as meaningful and significant as anyone's writing about anything. I'm glad you are here!

Small error:
go out for running. ---it is not even really an error... just sounds funny.

Ha ha, great use of goodlookingly! That is definitely not a word I have ever seen. Thanks for enriching my life!
I eat a lot, yet nevertheless I am good-lookingly skinny and slim.

Needless to say, running or exercising on the regular basis lift up not only our physical strength, but also self-confidence; I do not know if it is applicable to others, but definitely and undoubtedly it is to me.----excellent sentence, but put an s on the end of lift.

lifts.
If you said "and" it would need no s, but you said or, so it needs an s. :-)

It is therefore absolutely imperative that we should not get addicted to something addictive and eliminate and get rid of the bad habits, if any.------ it is redundant to say "addicted to something addictive.: Just say "We should not become addicted to anything."

But how can one avoid addiction? You are addicted to food and water, because you get very uncomfortable without them. You are addicted to this light show of life. How can one say "no" to something? I believe it is only when there is something else that you want more. If you ever fall into addiction, I hope you'll renew your passion for making a positive impact on the world.


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