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Adolescence - Are parents the best teachers? No they are not.


Enhsaruul 1 / 1  
Jan 26, 2013   #1
hi all!!! i'm high school student. I'm begginer so read my essay and give me advise please! Thank you!!!

Some kind of intution that i believe, parent's aren't best teachers to us.However, they're most special teacher to or lives.The reasons are presented below.

One of the primary reasons is there are many kinds of conflicts between parents and children when the child become teenager. Adolescence feel not simple feelings and seems like alone in the world sometimes. In this time some parents don't understand us like friends. Teenager's best teacher is friends. They help us when we feel disappointed, sad and terrible .

As is known to all, a child will be better trained with a systematic education. Also we can learn proffesional subjects and we can meet friends. Not only those, there are many process to improve our social knowledge and life basic knowledge like a parents.

All this is not to say that to learn from parents is useless. They always being our side and give valuable advise. So, we have to rely on what we learned from parents

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Didgeridoo - / 306 191  
Jan 26, 2013   #2
I believe that parents are not always the best teachers for us, but they are the most special teachers.

For example, there are many kinds of conflicts between parents and children when the children become teenagers(Like what?) . Adolescence is full of new and complicated feelings (Like what?),and many teenagers feel like no one else can understand what they are going through sometimes . At this time, some parents don't understand us like friends can . Teenagers' best teachers are friends because they help us when we feel disappointed, sad,or terrible (How?) .

Additionally , a child will be better trained with a systematic education. In school, we can learn professional subjects (Like what?) and we can meet friends (How will these things train us better?) . There are also many processes(Like what?) to improve our social knowledge and teach us life skillsto prepare us for adulthood and parenthood ourselves .

All this is not to say that knowledge from parents is useless. They are always at our side and give valuable advice . So, we have to rely on what we learned from parents (But... You can't just end your essay here, otherwise you change your stance on the essay.)
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Jan 26, 2013   #3
thank you so much. YOU are my first adviser :) i'll do my best :)
dumi 1 / 6,928 1592  
Jan 26, 2013   #4
Some kind of intution that i believe, parent's aren't best teachers to us.

Why do you say "some kind of intution"? .... For me, it does not mean anything to your idea. My suggestion;
In my view, parents are not the best teachers.

However, they're most special teachers to or lives

.... present this idea slightly differently;
However, they too are very special teachers in our lives in certain ways.

Some kind of intution that i believe, parent's aren't best teachers to us.However, they're most special teacher to or lives.The reasons are presented below.

.... This is your introduction and I feel it needs lots of improvement. Rather than starting with informing your opinion, it is better to introduce your topic to the reader;

Children learn many things from their parents. However, in my view, although they too are very important teachers, they are not the best teachers always.


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