How the air circulates in a house and waste of energy due to heat losses - IELTS diagram

Air leaks and heat loss in houses - ielts task 1

The diagram illustrates how air circulates in a house and it cause waste of energy due to heat losses. Overall it can be seen that large air getting in from the first floor. In any case, a lot of air has escaped from a home through the ceiling.

First, air leaks into the house from several different places. Both of windows and a door in first floor seems becoming the main entrance of it. Another air comes through from outdoor facet and crawl space in the basement, but only in a small quantity. Household appliances, such as dryer vent and kitchen fan also allow air to penetrating into home.

Next, owing to carrying heat from electric appliances and human activities in certain room, the large amount of air rises and escapes by penetrates through the ceiling in the first floor. This air passes attic hatch and recessed lights which leads to the space in roof.

These circumstances mean dissipate the energy since cold air absorbs the heat and carrying it to outside of the house.

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hello @Bayuwibowo, i'll try give some suggestions on your passage

and it cause waste of energy .
make sure about the tenses, it should be present simple
and it causes waste of energy

Overall it can be seen that large air getting ...
i reckon you should put comma, to create clear meanings.
Overall, it can be seen that large air getting ...

and a door in first floor
i guess preposition place (at) is better to alter it
and a door at first floor

Another air comes through from outdoor facet and ...
u got wrong on spelling, i guess this is
Another air comes through from outdoor faucet and ...

owing to carrying heat from electric appliances and human activities in certain room
u have to write plural here
owing to carrying heat from electric appliances and human activities in certain rooms

thanks

The diagram illustrates how air circulates in a house and it cause waste of energy due to heat losses CHANGES INTO The diagram shows the ins and outs of air circulation and how home loses heat.

Overall it can be seen that large air getting in from the first floor. In any case, a lot of air has escaped from a home through the ceiling.

Overall, what stands out from picture is the heat is lost from a room via exfiltration and infiltration attached. In any case, some heat is transmitted through the area of room.